All Comments on 'Cheerleader'

That is a great story. I loved it. Even though it's long it's all worth it. The family parts are the best and the very last orgy is really hot. Keep up the good work.

I love your style of writing. Everything was beautiful! What really grabbed my attention (and I was thankful for) was you used the same adjectives for the acts. Really keeps the readers attention on the story! Please please keep it up.

It wasn't too long. It kept me anticipating each new paragraph. Also, it seemed gloriously realistic even though an obvious fantasy. Thanks for keeping me really hot for more than an hour.

Really beautiful writing, with great style and variation, but overall so goddamn long that I just couldn't stand reading it anymore. The twins were wonderful with each other, but Larry was just creepy.

Kept me excited the whole time. What a great, great story teller. Hope you have this much excitement in "real" life.

Thanks

hie,

thats gotta be the best yet that i've read. I love your imagination!!! This story excited me alot!!!!

This was the first story I ever read here and it was great, it was very fun to read. I enjoyed the fact that it was long. More of an excellent thing!

This story was a bit long, and it took me a few weeks to read bits of it when i had the chance, but it was great! i was a bit disturbed by the incest though, lol

You need to introduce some story into your writing. Build up the excitement a little.

This was definently pretty damn good. However, it was getting a bit boring at some parts. Service was much better. Though this one is good too, compared to almost all others.

it was great but does the writer have a fetish with incest in this story? but otherwise its fucken amazing

one helluva hot story! thanks for getting me off!

too predictable. no real story. still loved it

I loved it!!!!

Great story!! I really enjoyed reading it. But I could have done without the mother/son scene. Also if you added more detail to the sex scenes it would really make it a lot better. The sex scenes just seemed to move too fast and were missing details. But, overall, great job! I enjoyed it!

Thank you for this story, i have read a lot of stories on here but yours is the best I have ever read, thank you. Wish I could find people like that .

awesome story a little bit too much incest but over all made me cum like 10 times

It was awesome, made me cum several times. Thank you!! I'm gonna read Service now too.

Damn, I thought the state of Nebraska was going to be included. What about Sheri and Heathers perents??? Shouldn't leave them out of all the sex!

That would start to make one hell of a neighborhood!!!

Loved it! Great story. Made me so horny I had to print it and read it again in bed with my boyfriend. Made me wish I had a brother!

I little video can change a situation in more ways than one. The youngsters really had their thing going since they all became "GOOD" friends. It is hard to believe, but, some people want to make sure their children learn properly.

Sure,I enjoying it,it is our best fantastic sex dream.Thanking Tryanyting for sharing this fabulous story!

Thank you for writing this story. IT was absolutely brilliant... best story yet. I will be reading more of ur stories, i really appreachiate you taking ur time to write this. There was a little bit too much incest, but other than that i think im going to buy a house in Nebraska now!

I have read many stories in my day but this one is by far the best. I thought that due to its length it would get boring but you shocked me with suprises around every corner. This juicy tale made a horny girl cum more then enough times.

Awesome

**Lilly**

i dont even know how to put it in words...this is the first time i have been on this site..ive always had a fasination with readin erotic stories...and the first story i read on this site was yours!!! and it left me in amazement and absolutely horny i just couldnt stop reading it..and it made me cum so many times...and what amazed me more was how the hole relationship with the family turned me on even when i knew it was wrong!! so once again i just absolutely loved your story!! hope to read more of yours

i came again and again thinking of this story....

Jesus christ.. I have no idea how to describe to you how much I loved it! The only thing I can think of is that I cummed 3 times while reading it!

love it love it

IT WAS SOOOO FUKIN GOOD

Stop writing gay ass stories where the children fuck their parents. That’s disturbing and your one messed up pervert. Besides that it was hot. Write more but leave the gay stuff out.

This is a very erotic story. But why mother and son just almost at the end of the story !

This erotic adventure is begging for more Ch. !

With a writerstalent like yours that should not be a problem.

Keep on writing !!!

That was yummy! Can't really say "finger lickin' good", but it was definitely "cock suckin' good"! The office scenes were a pleasant surprise & the cheerleaders, well they took me back a few years. *wink*

maybe it is just me being all girly and romantic and shit (i still love hardcore fucking though) but i had to stop reading on the fourth page because I didn't want James to lose his virginity to some slut friend of his sister's. I felt almost jealous on jamie's behalf... I'm disappointed.

The author did a nice job on this tale. I can see why it is one of the most read tales on the site. Long but the maximum amount of inscest and swinging. Need to read more of tryanything's writings

Great story! Please continue the adventure with Ch.03,04,05,etc.

i agree with some ppl...this story sure diddnt keep me dry for long 1 came 2 times reading it but found it disturbing bros and sisters fucking each other as well as there parents... very talented writer just change the situation,

not complaining though.

WTF is anyone as freaked out by this as I am??? The sex game with all the highschool kids was alright but wtf was with the last sex scene? The girl rode her father?! I dunno

This was a very erotic story and keep me very excited as I continued reading each section. I felt that you had at least three stories (chapters) in one long story. It could have been (chp 1) being the kids at an early age learning from their parents; (chp 2) the family moving and the kids in the new school; and, (chp 3) being the relationship between the parents and co-workers. Whatever...again, it was very erotic and kept me coming back to read more until the end. Thanks.

wow! that was very good! i loved it exept for the family fucking parts! they disturbed me a lil bit!

but evrything else was good exept for you used the same words over and over again!

this story made me cum so much as i fingerd myself time after time! thankyou!

GAY STORY

Scenes with cheerleaders eventually got boring. Last scene with family fucking was a bad ending. Nineteen-year-olds do NOT get a big kick out of drunken adults.

Final scenes, especially the last office visit seemed rushed, Games were fun, but with so many participants, character personalities/descriptions should be emphasized to avoid cookie cutter syndrome. All around a good story.

Everyone gets turned on by different things, from the moment you read about the brother and sister fondeling each other you should of stopped if you didnt like it. If this doesn't get you off then just dont read it! Don't try and make the author change their story, just read something else!

BTW, nice story i absolutley loved it. You're a very talented writer!

While it was very long and some times repeatative it was well thought out with good scenes. Just dont throw so many charecters out there in a single chapter story

Great story,

maybe too many people involved, it got kinda confusing as there was no blood left in my head!

I do like your writing style, deffinately quite enjoyable, yet on the same note you might want to get away from the incest, maybe write a detailed story that does not end up with the kids fucking there parents.

That was very interesting and I loved every second if it, I always wanted to know what was happening next, but there was a lot of sex which makes it a bit unbelievable but still very awesome

the thing thats wrong is the kids friends would not except them unless they where all whores but in my opinion it was pretty good.I rate it a 90.25 because it had to much family sex and kids wouldn't do that which brings me back to my point. P.S nice fantisy

The problem i had with the story was the clit stimulation. When you rub a womans clit it doesn't instantly make her cum. Also most men take a little longer than 10 minutes to cum. Other than that i thouroughly enjoyed the story.

One of the all time best family saga's I've read.

You did a wonderful job TryAnything!!

The voyourism and exhibitionism with all the twists and turns was great; and kept me in a constant state of throbbing arousal. Particularly arousing was June's setting up the peephole and knowing james, and then both kids were watching her!!!

it was good in the begining but it didnt evolve, AND WHY NO ANAL ??

I wish that james and jamie would have done it anal but other then that it was good I also wish jamie would have fucked john

With all due respect, this story had no believability, no eroticism, no heat, and WAAAAAY too much meaningless sex. A very good author from this site, in responding to my comments about his story, said with fiction, you can say anything you want. Yes, and like this story, it was (and is here) bad fiction. Now, can anyone, without looking, even vaguely remember the title of this work? Didn't think so, as the story went everywhere and nowhere. Some of the storylines were imaginative (card game, peephole), but the office scenarios were actually a turn-off and an insult to a reader's integrity. 'Course, if we had much integrity, we wouldn't have made it to Chapter 12.

Too much non stop action,life isnt like that,never the less I liked the story.Can anyone tell me the way to Nebraska.

Love Jenny Cook

If life was really like this, the world would be overpopulated in twenty seconds. Geez. And why is it called Cheerleader? There is no cheerleading! It should be called Whore-fest or something.

This and "service" remind me of the "taboo" series of porn films from the 70's. I lost track of how many times the men came. I couldn't match it, but tried.

it was alright except for the famly having sex together what the fuck you sick bastard

wow i cant begin to say how horny that made me.and how cleverly it was writen

The sex scenes in this story are many and well executed. It's just that the story itself is so long that it gets repetitive after a while. aT first i found the story very exciting but by the end I was too exhausted to appreciate it.

I also found the incest dimension unnecessary to an otherwise very sexy story. The main character is just cool, she knows what she wants and she is unabashed. It had a lot going for it, personally I find incest a turn off.

fucking brilliant!!! i'm so horny after reading this i want someone to fuck me too!!!

certainly made me real horny....

but i understand wat people say wen its too much...like the card games and stuff...i didnt really want to kno that much obout the others

excellant story, very well written with excellant grammer.

keep writing you`re very good

made me cum like 4 times , absolutly amazing , except last part where she fucked her dad wasnt that good , now i want to fuck a horny 18old girl .

well the incest was a little much, i didn't mind the sis/bro sex scenes so much but when they included the mother and father i was like woah and skipped over some of them. it did get a little repetatice but i didn't mind as i read it at different times, i skipped most of the office scenes as they didn't really appeal to me but over all good story mate!

There was like no cheerleading and a whole lotta fucked up shit. Wow.

that was outstanding. It makes it better since I love thin red heads. yummy

Jeez, what a bunch of inbreeders. probably end up with some screwed up kid.

loved it. best story ever

this was fuched up I can't belive this was written but still I couldn't keep away from it it was like the stoy was glued to my brain I loved it so much!!!

Started off OK, but went to shit in a handbasket, I am suprised you didn't have them fucking the pets!

This was a great story, and it got me very horny, but i have to say the incest was a little much. It kind of weirded me out the way everybody kept fvcking everybody like it was no problem at all, and nobody even worried about pregnancy. Was every female in the story on birth control? And if they were, which is highly doubtful, birth control isn't 100%. You sure wrote very nicely, but you need to bring this a little more back into reality. Just some constructive criticism I thought you might like to consider considering to make this story to 100%. Very nice job.

best story ever

got me so horney!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very good story!! I must have cummed a million times... but just read TryAnything's other stories like Service, and u get the feeling of "wat does this guy/girl do in his/her real life......"

sexy story but it was a bit too much taboo. also too repetitive and the story has nothing to do with the title. nice story tho

Really hot and I've read it twice, but I basically just read over the parts with Jamie and James. I didn't really like the cheerleaders...18 year old girls do NOT act like that with each other. Sorry, but they don't. And they were pretty uninteresting.

Larry disturbed me a bit, and the office scenes were boring. I found myself skipping over them half the time because I would get so damn bored.

The last part...wow. Too much, too much. As well as James and June...couldn't we have done without that? And the end?

Just tooo much incest. My only exception is, for some reason it didn't feel like Jamie and James were brother and sister sometimes. I actually felt an emotional connection to them, and really liked their sex scenes, especially the first time they fucked. They were definitely the most interesting.

Anyway, I'm going to go read Service, I've heard alright things about it.

An alright story overall, I had I don't even know how many orgasms.

fantastic, loved reading it. Made me really horny reading it. great job

Its like a freakin train wreck! Very poorly written, and very weird. Although it was so terrible, I found myself reading on into the night. I couldn't look away!

i pulled my dick so much over this and cum about 10 times

Although this was a very long story, I lalaloved it!!!!!!!

since it was really long then I was forced to spend the whole night reading it. It was such a great story and I was constantly cumming.! Thanks a lot for that, espically because it usually takes quite a lot to make me cum. This story makes me wish I had a family & friends like this;) haha. You are a great writer and I hope yu never stop writing!

♥ ilahvjames&june&jamie&john&sherithemost!(probably cuz they're the most horniest ones in the story!

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very good story and learned alot from it

oh my god.

this is wonderful.

this have to be my fav so far!

althought a bit long, but its fucking cool.

i want a cock inside me now!!!

This is long but well worth the time.....great story wish it was me....lol Had me horny all the way Thanx

I don't understand what the griping is about; this is an AWESOME story! Other Literotica authors should take note; the plot developed nicely (two independent stories inexorably coming together) and the "main" characters were well defined. I would have liked more individual back story, but I definitely didn't feel like the characters were underdeveloped for what the story is. This isn't, after all, Dostoyevsky. THANK YOU; I wish more stories in I/T took after this one.

One of the finest stories that I've read till date. The way the story developed slowly kept me hard even after I jacked off twice. I absolutely loved the sex game those kids played. The game felt to fucking realistic that I'd give my left nut to be a part of it any time. Absolutely awsome!

Loved it and was aroused throughout. especially enjoyed June and the way she got hotter throughout the story.

The sex scenes were fantastic. Especially the kids. Something about high school tens having hot fuck orgies turns me on. The office scenes I sort of skipped over. It would've been cool to see more variety in setting, like maybe having the kids fucking in the football field or in a classroom or the park or some other weird place. Let's face it. There's so much incest in here there probably isn't anything you can't throw in.

Again, loved the story. Great games they played. The scene when Jamie and James fuck for the first time is the best. And... good job not having the bottle land on two dudes. That would've killed the story.

Jacked off to this at least 10 times.

absolutely fantastic. the best ive read to date, it had me cum several times. ty vm!

THAT, My friends, was the best sex story i have ever read in my entire life, i was stroking the entire time, im cummed almost 23 times, and the end was hilariouse. "hi daddy, how was that?" made me burst in to joyouse tears of hilaroty. i laughed until me sides hurt. im going to print this off and read it a few hundred more times!!

I loved this story, one of the best I've read. Though I wish there had been more between father and daughter, winning him over to the dark side as it were ^_^

the best sex storie ive ever read i will definetely be taking notes

I couldnt stop reading it was great.but jamie should get pregnant by her brother on her 19th birthday.but it was hot.

Quite simply, this is one of the best erotic tales I've ever had the (extended) pleasure of reading. Great characterization, no real "out of left field" moments, more than enough hot situations to feed the greedy, and even the cliches were well-done. Awesome job.

I love this story... woah. I felt as if I was really there. You're an amazing writer. Keep it up! :))

I must rate 5 stars for this story. Keep writing.

Great job loved it the peep hole was fantastic way to begin to pull this together plausible even. Keep it up

the best parts of the story were the orgies with the horny teenagers. nothing is hotter to me than horny teenagers sucking, fucking, and just making out as they use each others' bodies for pleasure ... god that's HOT!!!

it's even hornier when you use the real words to describe their bodies ... tits, cocks, and cunts ... totally got my imagination (and my own cock) worked up!

the cum scenes were incredible ... the cock money shot is the hottest of all and it is wonderful how you describe the cocks shooting their hot sticky loads into pussys and mouths and onto faces and bodies, yummmmmmmm

all in all, an awesome, stomach-churing cum-inspiring piece of work.

thank you!!!

sam

I do not mean to destroy the story: it is great, however as I re-read it from years ago when you posted it, I felt again that the 12 pager should have been cut down to 9 or 10 not because of length, but because of the feeling that I got that there was a mechanical add-on the last 3 pages. Too bad in my opinion.

Okay , so this family is totally fucked up . What family just has sex for fun no weirdness ?? Hello! Your mom pushed you out of where your tongue is licking :P BUT I hot hottest when it was only Jamie and James fucking and sucking . The office scenes were boring to me .. Also did anybody notice that June was getting fucked by 4 or 5 different people a day , damn she's lucky ..

I didn't masturbate to this but I was hot.

That is all ;)

Your stories are very entertaining, and I really enjoy reading them. The near non-stop action is fun, if not a little unrealistic. No one ever seems to limited in their ability to perform. But that's what fiction is all about, I guess. Keep up the good work!