Being a Male Witch... Please don't call us Warlocks...we aren't.. that term means Oath Breaker and is kinda of an insult.... other then that the story was good.
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Anonymous10/02/13
Warlock is a term that is generally accepted by most people when refering to a Male Witch.
Every sect of warlocks has their own opinion about what they should be called. I say, if you want to call them warlocks, call them warlocks.
Most fantasy uses of an magic user, be it witch, warlock, mage, sorcerer, necromancer, pyromancer, chronomancer, etc.... are all fantasy based and usually have virtually no connection to the practicing wiccan religion outside of the general terminology and thought process that has been taken from Christian dogma and turned into sword and sorcery motif over the last century or so.
If your a practicing wiccan of whatever sect or order (sorry I don't know enough about the structure or breakdown of the tenants of the practice or religion to which you belong. I've known one or two practicing wiccans so I know a little, and I also know that there's not any 100% true center to the religion), then good for you man.
Though let me state as per the above, this is the fantasy use of your belief system, and while I understand people hold their religious beliefs sacred and don't like to see them used wrongly or made fun of..... in the end.. dude its just a story.
I'll tell any Christian that I come across the same thing when it comes to movies like the Davinci Code or anything of that nature that they get up in arms about. Your beliefs are yours and yours alone, there will always be other people to take anything religious/sacred/story wise/anything of this nature, and twist/corrupt/make fun of it.
By all means I didn't see you take exception to basically borrowing the name and description of a god followed by some of the nastiest warriors the earth has ever seen. Yet that god was worshiped for half a milenia, and today he's a super hero in a movie and comics.... I hope you understand where I'm coming from if you read this.
As to the story
well told except for the fact that the guy didn't simply walk away from someone who holds their family's opinion and edicts above her own, or not for snapping her parents off at the knees for doing that shit, or hiding a child from him.
Sorry I hold no love for people of that nature, and while its only a story, to have someone react like that and not get seriously bent out of shape over whats going on, well...
I know to challenge some one of real power with no power to back you up is usually a loosing proposition, and as said pride commeth before the fall.... often the fall is the only way to be what you should be. To simper and bow like the main character is to deserve what you get later in life (in this case the parents rulling his house for as long as they're around, not to mention the child.)
5/5 for the base story
-2 as per described above
3/5
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Anonymous10/02/13
I thought it was a good story. It could have been longer, with more time spent on the Marcie problem and developing that.
As far as the apparent disconnect between the story's depiction of witchcraft and the reality of it, that shouldn't bother anybody too much. It is fiction, after all. There was a writer from England, Dennis Wheatley, long gone, but he wrote about witches and satanists. His stories included much that was frankly wrong and rubbish, but the stories were good (if a little jaded now). Writers have been taking liberties with the truth for centuries. Even Shakespeare did it. So anybody that does the same is in good company. Don't let it faze you.
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Anonymous10/02/13
Yeah, "warlock" originally meant "oath-breaker" ...
... but "nice" originally meant "foolish", "silly" originally meant "prosperous", "priest" originally meant "old-timer", and "bishop" originally meant "watcher". Word meanings change over time, and words mean now what people use them to mean now. Don't sweat it.
Another great story from one of my favorite authors. Loved the way you took a myth of witches and potions and made a story out of it. Mind you after reading this story I really wonder if it is a myth.
Keep the stories coming, I am always looking for them.
It felt a little "mechanical" at times and there were sections that I wanted to feel more emotional about what was happening, but otherwise I enjoyed the read.
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Anonymous10/29/13
it was a good read, but
I enjoyed the story it was cute. I guess I expect too much. I expected to be scared or turned on or even better both. This is literotica (Erotic stories) and the theme is halloween. Yes there was a witch, actually a family of them but I did not experience fear and I was not the least bit turned on
Butterfly
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Anonymous11/04/13
amazing
Oh my god that made me cry ;c what a beautiful love story. So sexy and emotional..loved it!
Another fine story in a long line of fine stories...
... As with most of your stories, this one left me with a very good taste in my mouth. Some people have it and some people don't and you, my friend, definitely have it.
Using the present to get to the past is a nice trick - so many really start now - immediately get to the "where we started" part then come back to the present and actually tell the story - you wove it together very well.
The accuracy of any terminology and its relation to ant ones reality is not terribly important - one man's religious fact is another man's myth based fable - we all need to remember that.
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Anonymous11/08/14
REALLY BEWITCHING STORY
REALLY ENJOYED THE STORY I LOST IT BUT FINALLY FOUND IT AGAIN.
SEQUEL?? IN MY FAVORITES MOLLY FOR A WITCHES NAME(MAYBE)??
I've never felt the need to comment on any story before. I really, really enjoyed it.
In addition I was not distracted by mis-spellings, wrong punctuation, and poor grammar. Obviously the story was carefully read, not depending on a mechanical spell checker that cannot tell if "then" or "than" should be used.
Thank you.
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Anonymous01/17/16
With a touch of class
NEAT STORY! You are a class writer of fiction! (I0 stars) thank you for sharing this story with us! Love you all! Bye. Greg. Oh do Witches Really Exist? I wish.
I love an inventive mind, and a story teller has it, usually. I don't usually read sci-fi stories, because they just don't come across the right way for me. As different as this story was from the norm, it worked for me. I know it was a little bogus, but isn't life sometimes. A very nice, entertaining read.
- I really enjoyed this off-beat tale! While the story got a tad clumsy at times,that whole thing about the deaths in the cemetery for example,it did have a magical feel about it.
I like the premise of this story and all, but it just didn't work. She says she tells her parents everything. Well that is a lie, because she hid the truth until she became pregnant. Then she tells the main author he will find someone else better. Well look what happens to him he finds somebody else. Somebody awful and it was all because she was a coward. I didn't like the witch character at all. All this I can't tell you crap and it was for his own good was just a weak plot device. Also why drink something to make you forget. If he loved her he would never have done that. I really wanted to like the story I just couldn't. Why couldn't she help him become a warlock, so they could be together. The story was just too weak.
I like the premise of this story and all, but it just didn't work. She says she tells her parents everything. Well that is a lie, because she hid the truth until she became pregnant. Then she tells the main author he will find someone else better. Well look what happens to him he finds somebody else. Somebody awful and it was all because she was a coward. I didn't like the witch character at all. All this I can't tell you crap and it was for his own good was just a weak plot device. Also why drink something to make you forget. If he loved her he would never have done that. I really wanted to like the story I just couldn't. Why couldn't she help him become a warlock, so they could be together. The story was just too weak.
of hokum....love stories like this that stretch the realms of belief and fantasy.....today we call witches..HERBALISTS OR ALTERNATIVE MEDICINE .....years ago because of bigotry by the church many so called witches were murdered....the most famous were The Pendle Witches...who...basically were just herbalists who knew how to use the plants that surround us for curing aches and pains etc.....today....many Amazonian tribes and others not tainted by modern society still practice herbalism....who knows what future cures we are losing by the rapid destruction of the Amazonian Forest and others.....who knows...even a cure for cancer ....and all to line the pockets of super rich bastards who don't give a toss as long as they make piles of money....
English
Scratch one off of the bucket list
Use " It was a dark and stormy night " can be scratched off the bucket list. Excellent story. Thank you for sharing
would like to have seen this expanded.
Loved it as usual
These people were strangely enough easy to like. I wish that I was a warlock....
I am still not sure that I believe Brad's story...
OK
I know that when I see a D.G.Hear story it will be a good read. I am seldom disapointed. Thank you
Worth a followup
Nicely done, begs for more on this interesting family, if Molly becomes a witch or stays mortal.
Great job. You are very diverse with your creations.
ITS MUCH EZer TO BELIEVE THAN DIS-BELIEVE
and you don't have to give solid explanations, TK U MLJ LV NV
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Being a Male Witch... Please don't call us Warlocks...we aren't.. that term means Oath Breaker and is kinda of an insult.... other then that the story was good.
Warlock is a term that is generally accepted by most people when refering to a Male Witch.
Every sect of warlocks has their own opinion about what they should be called. I say, if you want to call them warlocks, call them warlocks.
Nice little story DG, I like your current editor.
to genman1:
Most fantasy uses of an magic user, be it witch, warlock, mage, sorcerer, necromancer, pyromancer, chronomancer, etc.... are all fantasy based and usually have virtually no connection to the practicing wiccan religion outside of the general terminology and thought process that has been taken from Christian dogma and turned into sword and sorcery motif over the last century or so.
If your a practicing wiccan of whatever sect or order (sorry I don't know enough about the structure or breakdown of the tenants of the practice or religion to which you belong. I've known one or two practicing wiccans so I know a little, and I also know that there's not any 100% true center to the religion), then good for you man.
Though let me state as per the above, this is the fantasy use of your belief system, and while I understand people hold their religious beliefs sacred and don't like to see them used wrongly or made fun of..... in the end.. dude its just a story.
I'll tell any Christian that I come across the same thing when it comes to movies like the Davinci Code or anything of that nature that they get up in arms about. Your beliefs are yours and yours alone, there will always be other people to take anything religious/sacred/story wise/anything of this nature, and twist/corrupt/make fun of it.
By all means I didn't see you take exception to basically borrowing the name and description of a god followed by some of the nastiest warriors the earth has ever seen. Yet that god was worshiped for half a milenia, and today he's a super hero in a movie and comics.... I hope you understand where I'm coming from if you read this.
As to the story
well told except for the fact that the guy didn't simply walk away from someone who holds their family's opinion and edicts above her own, or not for snapping her parents off at the knees for doing that shit, or hiding a child from him.
Sorry I hold no love for people of that nature, and while its only a story, to have someone react like that and not get seriously bent out of shape over whats going on, well...
I know to challenge some one of real power with no power to back you up is usually a loosing proposition, and as said pride commeth before the fall.... often the fall is the only way to be what you should be. To simper and bow like the main character is to deserve what you get later in life (in this case the parents rulling his house for as long as they're around, not to mention the child.)
5/5 for the base story
-2 as per described above
3/5
I thought it was a good story. It could have been longer, with more time spent on the Marcie problem and developing that.
As far as the apparent disconnect between the story's depiction of witchcraft and the reality of it, that shouldn't bother anybody too much. It is fiction, after all. There was a writer from England, Dennis Wheatley, long gone, but he wrote about witches and satanists. His stories included much that was frankly wrong and rubbish, but the stories were good (if a little jaded now). Writers have been taking liberties with the truth for centuries. Even Shakespeare did it. So anybody that does the same is in good company. Don't let it faze you.
Yeah, "warlock" originally meant "oath-breaker" ...
... but "nice" originally meant "foolish", "silly" originally meant "prosperous", "priest" originally meant "old-timer", and "bishop" originally meant "watcher". Word meanings change over time, and words mean now what people use them to mean now. Don't sweat it.
loved it
i dont know if they do, but if they did i would like to find one like serena and fall in love with her
Sweet story.
No less factual than Charmed or Bewitched.
good
Another great story from one of my favorite authors. Loved the way you took a myth of witches and potions and made a story out of it. Mind you after reading this story I really wonder if it is a myth.
Keep the stories coming, I am always looking for them.
A good story
It felt a little "mechanical" at times and there were sections that I wanted to feel more emotional about what was happening, but otherwise I enjoyed the read.
it was a good read, but
I enjoyed the story it was cute. I guess I expect too much. I expected to be scared or turned on or even better both. This is literotica (Erotic stories) and the theme is halloween. Yes there was a witch, actually a family of them but I did not experience fear and I was not the least bit turned on
Butterfly
amazing
Oh my god that made me cry ;c what a beautiful love story. So sexy and emotional..loved it!
terrific story. more!! a sequel perhaps?
Another fine story in a long line of fine stories...
... As with most of your stories, this one left me with a very good taste in my mouth. Some people have it and some people don't and you, my friend, definitely have it.
Bicely done - as usual
The story flowed well - for the most part -
Using the present to get to the past is a nice trick - so many really start now - immediately get to the "where we started" part then come back to the present and actually tell the story - you wove it together very well.
The accuracy of any terminology and its relation to ant ones reality is not terribly important - one man's religious fact is another man's myth based fable - we all need to remember that.
REALLY BEWITCHING STORY
REALLY ENJOYED THE STORY I LOST IT BUT FINALLY FOUND IT AGAIN.
SEQUEL?? IN MY FAVORITES MOLLY FOR A WITCHES NAME(MAYBE)??
RON TEXAS
just the right amount of fantasy
mixed with reality to make it fun.
I liked this story.
I've never felt the need to comment on any story before. I really, really enjoyed it.
In addition I was not distracted by mis-spellings, wrong punctuation, and poor grammar. Obviously the story was carefully read, not depending on a mechanical spell checker that cannot tell if "then" or "than" should be used.
Thank you.
With a touch of class
NEAT STORY! You are a class writer of fiction! (I0 stars) thank you for sharing this story with us! Love you all! Bye. Greg. Oh do Witches Really Exist? I wish.
loved it
I love an inventive mind, and a story teller has it, usually. I don't usually read sci-fi stories, because they just don't come across the right way for me. As different as this story was from the norm, it worked for me. I know it was a little bogus, but isn't life sometimes. A very nice, entertaining read.
Bewitched!
- I really enjoyed this off-beat tale! While the story got a tad clumsy at times,that whole thing about the deaths in the cemetery for example,it did have a magical feel about it.
I wanted to like it
I like the premise of this story and all, but it just didn't work. She says she tells her parents everything. Well that is a lie, because she hid the truth until she became pregnant. Then she tells the main author he will find someone else better. Well look what happens to him he finds somebody else. Somebody awful and it was all because she was a coward. I didn't like the witch character at all. All this I can't tell you crap and it was for his own good was just a weak plot device. Also why drink something to make you forget. If he loved her he would never have done that. I really wanted to like the story I just couldn't. Why couldn't she help him become a warlock, so they could be together. The story was just too weak.
I wanted to like it
I like the premise of this story and all, but it just didn't work. She says she tells her parents everything. Well that is a lie, because she hid the truth until she became pregnant. Then she tells the main author he will find someone else better. Well look what happens to him he finds somebody else. Somebody awful and it was all because she was a coward. I didn't like the witch character at all. All this I can't tell you crap and it was for his own good was just a weak plot device. Also why drink something to make you forget. If he loved her he would never have done that. I really wanted to like the story I just couldn't. Why couldn't she help him become a warlock, so they could be together. The story was just too weak.
loved it...just brilliant bit
of hokum....love stories like this that stretch the realms of belief and fantasy.....today we call witches..HERBALISTS OR ALTERNATIVE MEDICINE .....years ago because of bigotry by the church many so called witches were murdered....the most famous were The Pendle Witches...who...basically were just herbalists who knew how to use the plants that surround us for curing aches and pains etc.....today....many Amazonian tribes and others not tainted by modern society still practice herbalism....who knows what future cures we are losing by the rapid destruction of the Amazonian Forest and others.....who knows...even a cure for cancer ....and all to line the pockets of super rich bastards who don't give a toss as long as they make piles of money....
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