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Shub-Niggurath's Disciple

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by Anonymous

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by Nemo1810/02/13

Should be reclassified

Why is this erotic horror?

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by 10/16/13

Good Job

You know how to use dialog correctly.

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by patientlee10/17/13

I like what you did with this!

I like the format of this a lot. Good story.

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by SecondCircle10/17/13

They would be proud....

Great use of the mythos. I like the idea of using the recorder, and telling the story through the interview. It's a nice change of pace and has the reader constantly searching for answers and clues.

I do sorta wish that they would have let her tell a lot more of the story. Maybe more in depth about the scene when she caught them, and the sex, might have bumped up the eroticism. And perhaps a little more on her relationship to the old ones.

Other than that, holding back some of the details was wise I think. Good job and great Halloween entry.

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by Anonymous10/30/13

good story, but...

Too short. A Lovecraft story would've done a better job building up the suspense, the climax. Still a very good idea, too good to waste. Also, more tentacles, lol, please.

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by simonlilith03/04/14

I've always had a weak spot for Lovecraft - I think he would have approved of the format!

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