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I liked your poem. It was very intense. Lovely.

I like the last line.

Passionate and just a bit kinky... Love it!

Tod , it's the first

BDSM poem of yours , i am readin' : excellent !!

Only the second one

I have ever written Ash, bdsm not usually my thing I normally rock vanilla but with an assortment of toppings :-)

Thanks as always lesse your comments on almost every poem though time consuming is a great service to all poets that post to this sight. :-)

Thanks mysteria

To theoncomingstorm glad you liked my little bit of kink ;-)

Erotica, not pornography

You are so good at that Todski

thanks oldbear

I have written porno type poems as well, less so recently, lurid description is limiting to the author, and the more you let the reader play hopefully they better connect with the piece, just my thoughts at the moment may change tomorrow though, this poetry stuff is tricky business :-)

Tod, I think the pacing is just right in this. I caught myself smirking throughout the poem, the slow reveal of intention sets us (readers) as observers to something that is happening. I've commented before that I feel you'd do very well with prose, and this is why: vivid descriptions.

My favorite passages were: "twisting the knife of anticipation / startled cries garner no attention". You could rewrite this from the other person's perspective, and these lines would give the poem a much more somber mood. Not that it needs to actually be a dark situation; just that the anticipation can be shared by the reader. :)

I'm not sure about smorgasbord, however. But then, I'd never heard that word before! It sounds funny. :D Sorry, ignore this last bit, hehe.

Simply Delicious!

My compliments to the Chef!

It certainly tantalised my taste buds

I do so hope the woman finishes with her just deserts

Tod!...I award you 5 Michelin stars

Divine!

I'm working my way through your catalog and so far this is my favorite.

Your phrasing is impeccable. "Shadow casting a phantom/she can sense but not feel" put me in that chair and from there it was as if the words were being whispered in my ear.

Between this and what you're throwing down on the threads, you have a book. Add shadowy illustrations and you'd have a damn good book.

And just in case it wasn't already clear, this is a new favorite. Not a just a LIT favorite but a favorite among all the poetry I've read. Your ability to draw the reader in is superb.

Captivating!

This poem definitely deserves 5 stars. I especially loved the use of lemon as it complemented the bittersweet-ness of the events. A favourite!

Sensual and flowing. This is evocative without sacrificing directness. Your choices here are mature and precise.