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Thank you
Thank you for the beautiful HEA! I was worried you would put to many twists in but I really enjoyed this ending and loved the whole story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
OK,short,rushed
It was ok,seemed a bit rushed and short,,just to get it finished is what it felt like,,at least it did get finished,,thank you,,,,,
Ending Rushed, Left with Questions
The grandfather getting custody of his grandsons seemed to come out of nowhere. Also is Alex immortal and physically ages much slower? Was Lisa still mortal after they had sex or after they married? What about their kids? Mortal or Immortal? Human or Angel? The series was enjoyable, but I just think it could have been more detailed in places.
The champagne is missing the bubbles
I like the story but the ending was a little flat. How and why did her father end up with custody of her nephews? What happened to their mother? What happened to Victor and his houseful of mistresses? There is so much unsettled.
Wonderfull
You really have a special gift for writing, don't stop. This kind og gift needs to be nurtured and shared!
Why?
I wanted to like this story. I really did. I pushed through four chapters littered with grammatical errors because the storyline was interesting. But I think you rushed the ending severely just so that it would be completed. I would have loved to see a scene with Victor, his nistresses, and his son because I think it would have helped to reslove some of the conflict. Good story, but it was flawed by inconsistencies and not enough of closure for all characters involved.
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