I thought the story was great, she obviously gave him the very short shorts knowing that there would be a problem for him. Having been in almost a similar situation, it is embarrassing, but this is still great. Lets have chapters 2+ please.
Normally I like my erotica just a bit more erotic. You were funny. Also agree that having them move into the house and take care of business would be more realistic. Any woman who went to all that trouble to set the scene up would never stop until she got something out of it. Story shows promise. Keep on writing!
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Pretty funny
The ending wasn't expected, maybe they should have got it together in the house? Still, it was funny!
Very Humerous Offer
I thought the story was great, she obviously gave him the very short shorts knowing that there would be a problem for him. Having been in almost a similar situation, it is embarrassing, but this is still great. Lets have chapters 2+ please.
GOOD, BUT:
Normally I like my erotica just a bit more erotic. You were funny. Also agree that having them move into the house and take care of business would be more realistic. Any woman who went to all that trouble to set the scene up would never stop until she got something out of it. Story shows promise. Keep on writing!
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