Art work was good, story line was juvenile with no character development.
Hi. Thank you for your input. Not really aiming to tell a good story right now. My work for now focuses more on the illustrations themselves (that is, for now designed to be a continuous series of panel-based illustrations focusing mainly on erotica with wild, whimsical, silly themes) more than telling a solid story. For now :). Hopefully when I get more time and if the incentive is there, I could create a more solid story. I am, however, thinking, if my time would allow it, I may do a story-based work sooner or later.
good start Pics are good stories not bad
I appreciate this for what it is. Keep up the good work an develop your style. A good story can be shoehorned in at any time. Mother and Daughters threesomes are hot and my erect cock is not complaining.
I guess, for a little constructive criticism, you could better differentiate the mother from the daughters. I admit, I was a little confused at first as to which was which. All three kinda look like they could be the same age and only the dialogue let's us know who is who. Perhaps the daughters should look a bit younger or the mother a bit older.
The Frames could be a little more detailed and coloful but aside from that it was a nice little comic.
It was a good start for, what could become, a very spicy story but the illustrations were so light they were barely visible.
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