Every Picture Tells a Story

A Classic!!!

Perfectly executed

congrats

You are a very good writer. I have enjoyed several of your stories. Keep writing.

Not perfect

but liked the story. Thanks!

TO GET YOU HAVE TO GIVE

sometimes the wronged party has to save what he is able. TK U MLJ LV NV

2 Dimensional Purposefully Preachy Story

As a counterpoint to the slew of wanton, slut-wife & willing cuckold story this excels. In terms of being a full-bodied multiple perspective story, this falls short. The best of the best authors will tell us the shortfalls of the marriages on the rocks, or at least the perceptions / delusions of all the people involved.

This is a consequence story & a " good " one in only that regard. It doesn't break any new ground & gives abbreviated stick-figure sketches of the characters & their soon-to be sundered marriages . It's in the showing of direct & collateral damage where qhml1 finally breaks a descriptive sweat.

This author has done so much better,in so many other stories. There is no doubt in my mind, this effort used but a fraction of qhml1's usual talent & time that he's accorded to multiple, past efforts I've quintuple starred.

This was a perfunctory BTB exercise and equally as generic in it's own "write" as aforementioned wife/sluts and willing cuck sagas. ***

Nice read

Point by point pretty much exactly what I would have done. 5*

I almost quit reading when he said he was a Navy Seal, but...

I'm glad I read the next few words because I then read on. As a story it lacked drama, but as an account of what really happens sometimes, it was spot on! (except for suing the company they worked for, that's almost impossible to do)
I gave this 5* because of the realism. No cucks, no bitches burned, just a short, true to life story. We need more like this. Congratulations on the job well done.

Consequences

Good writing for a cheating story. Simply, you cheat, get caught and pay the price. This just drives home that consequences are a bitch.

Nice little flash story by a very good author.

FullCuckold56 weighs in

Consequences indeed, almost 5 dozen Full Cuckoldings makes FullCuckold56 the resident expert on cuckoldry, creampies, and cucking.
Consequences, 'nuff said!

Where is the erotic bit.

An average consequences story, no twist, no surprise, NO SEX. I guess as a counterpoint to all the husbands watching their wives cheat that have been posted lately it adds balance. I think some authors should look at the name of this site again, particularly the last bit and give us something erotic! 3*

Okay

Better than the cuck shit, but next time, please proof read prior to posting. This was riddled with errors, e.g, "I thank you taking time", "all their joining were at their office" (should be "joinings were", or "joining was"), "They're children involved" (should have been "There are children"), etc.

Thanks***

For the read.

All Cheater Stories Really Are Tales of Consequences

When you decide to dishonor yourself, there are always consequences. Even if you are not caught, you live with your dishonor. Forgiveness, does not let you forget what kind of person you are. Forgiveness does not change your character. Even if God forgives you, you know you are still a turd.

Good read,

thanks.

your usual 5 thanks

Some of your stories are really good.

It's like you're two different writers. This story was listless. It was pretty dull really. He was the usual great husband and she cheated simply for a little fun. He caught her and destroyed her while making himself wealthy. Now here is a plot I'm tossing out for those that have problems thinking of plots and twists.

Have a married couple where the wife cheats with her boss and all hell breaks lose The husband gets several million dollars from the company as they all do in these stories, and then he moves to Grand Rapids. A month or so later, his wife joins him. It seems that once he settled the law suit, he moved to Grand Rapids and stopped the divorce proceedings. They live happily ever after. Sure the wife got laid by her boss a few times, but they made several million bucks. Many husbands would be understanding, especially if it was their idea and it was so lucrative.

Perfect

End of the world. This is Ben's thought. You cheat it's the end of the world. Amy and Josh figured they have a little fun, no one will be the wiser. WRONG. All cheaters are selfish assholes only thinking of themselves. They ruined their lives by getting a little strange. Fuck them.

Not what I was expecting for your next submission

I've been eagerly awaiting your next chapter to "Finding an editor" in romance. Its been almost 20 days, what's up with that? You said you had a slew of stories ready to go. This was good just not the submission I was looking for. Thanks for the effort but please can you work on finishing that one off.

Good Story, Not at All Listless. So there, HardDaysKnight!

Straightforward and fun, sort of.

Why the hell did Josh's wife stay with him? It's clear there wasn't any love lost in the marriage. This honestly sounds like one of those garbage it's okay for the asshole to cheat, because forgiveness is swell, but the bitch must burn and fuck forgiveness. BTB goes both ways. Sunny should have ended up with a better man and her kids with a better father.

Not Really a Story

Just a cautionary exposition. Standard BTB. Your skills as a writer took a vacation.

very well done chronological trace of a destructed marriage

it isn't burn the bitch, it was divorce over adultery, had he cut her off from money and destroyed her it would have been BTB

Good Flash Tale

The detail that the Anon below asked would be the claim, that I read, that only 50% of the cases of cheating being outed lead to immediate divorces. People have too many reasons to stay together. Having a little fun can be damn stupid!

Thank you

I always enjoy reading your stories.

Thank you.

Not bad, not bad at all.

I thought Hard Days Night was a little harsh. You had an idea. You wrote it, and you put it up. It was short and painful, but I thought it worked. Of course I almost always give fives.

Yep. Submitted by a hacker QHML wannabe.

Don't know how they got QHML's password. Not bad (4*) for a wannabe! Hubby is not happy, but it is very amorphous! Both cheaters are also very superficially developed...all the pain is evident, but the 'why' is less so!

The follow-up is awkward and unconvincing...save the space! Stop, perhaps, when Sweetie discovers that Hubby is remarrying. No need to extend out for her eventual happy future.

Ho hum

We all recycle plots,and devices, but the characters are different, and somethings are differedt. This tale was stale. here's the outline:
Wife has a fling with boss
She has anal with boss, not him
Husband sends photos to all so as to humiliate her/them
Husband lives well
Wife regrets everything for the rest of her life.
Did I miss a cleche?
Like others said, not anywhere as good as your previous work. Still it found favor with many, not so much with me

Chilley

Splitlicker, what a loser!

Having to parrot HDK's inane comments.

Good story 5*

ok

I liked it....No games, well handled and over.......

Humm... a technical effort, if I am to guess

As a story I kinda liked it -

But I really parse this as a technical writing effort - he has removed the protagonists' point of view from the story. The mechanism of the email puts the protagonist at a distant third person, and so the only "living" story tellers are the cheating couple.

QHML is good, and the rendition of the emotions of the cheaters is compelling - perhaps to reassure his audience he still can do it. But I think he was trying to see if removing the protagonist makes the POV of the wife and boss clearer. In which case, the story was supposed to portray regret.

Maybe.

YMMV.

Green-something

A very good revenge on a cheating wife story

I thought the storyline was better than a just burn the bitch storyline, he took his revenge to the max and gave her the humiliation she deserved.

Thanks for the read.

That was excellent!

I was hoping for a great Nuclear Strike tale, and you have delivered once again!

5 HUGE Stars!

Very nice....

This is the kind of story that I look for in the LW category. Thanks. 5+

Well Done!

Many of these little tales are done and are entertaining, but are to some degree or another fanciful. While still enjoyable, the lack of reality sets them back just a smidge.

This one was spot on. It presented the devastating consequences of thoughtless and selfish actions without being unrealistic and over the top. It was very well written from the standpoint of mechanics as well. The errors in grammar were minimal and the story flowed well.

I gave it five full stars. An excellent piece of writing on your part. I congratulate and thank you for an entertaining read.

Very well written

Enjoyed this sime tale of misery and happiness

I liked the style

just because it appears in a narrative form doesn't mean that its wrong. Nice story

Great outline

The first part was good. Now finish writing the actual story.

This was a first draft, no more. It was rife with errors, some making the action confusing, some just stupid and sloppy.

There was way too much jumping around, as well.

A good editor could have helped bang this boilerplate stuff into a story.

Good little flash story

While it lacked the emotional element of "The Cost" it was still a good read.

Liked it very much, but...

...I hope you are going to finish it - it is worth the efford.

Good flash story

5***** Amy was simple cheater who avoided to be serial cheater or slut again.
The sad divorce, the cratastophic husband revenge and the not inmediate long time connection succes were enough iniciative to change her. One part of the cheaters can change themselves, but we have not any sciencific instrument to measure their brain if they reformed themsefs?? My question is only. Why has not Amy got common kids with her new husband????
BTW I have a story on SOL (storiesonline dot net) where the divorced wife reformed herself with a second husband...........title is "Skeleton From the Cupboard: Sarah and Frank".

Another 5* story from you

Sad, but very readable. Thank you.

% *'s

Sad for the Cheaters but in the End maybe the Husband got better then he would have had.

Thanks for the offering.

This is what we need around here!

More good stories about consequences of your actions. Not necessarily BTB stories or reconciliation stories, both are acceptable, both happened in this story. Just no more willing cuck stories. *****

Dream on

Nice pay back fantasy. Too bad real life doesn't work that way.

Awesome and realistic tale of how it should turn out when cheater gamble their marriages.

Hope the cheaters realize the price to be paid when dipping the wick in the company ink well. Fucking brain-dead idiots - hope the nightmares last a long, long time. Author - please continue to share these realistic tales of cheating scum getting caught and consequences. A "5".

good going

qhm/1 I liked how you laid out this story and remorselessly forced it to a realistic ending. That everyone, even peripherally involved, loses when foolish people act with blatant indiscretion.

As for the comment that Sunny and the children could have wound up with a better husband and father. the honest reality as that most dissolved families do not and the children are left to suffer as the collateral damage. The best Sunny and the children could hope for is a different man, with better self-discipline. They still would be left wounded, all the better man could do is patiently nurse them all back to a better state of mental health..

Why do almost all the women in these stories have red hair? Is it some kind of fetish? I've never found redheads attractive so I'm baffled.

Red or Blonde

To comment re: Red hair
Yup. Or Blonde. And usually with DD breasts in the 7th grade.
My Dad liked Red Heads. Mom was a brunette. You figure.
Oh - liked the story 5*

Difficult

Most of your stories have a few typos and glitches but this one is very difficult to read. Please find a good editor/proofreader and grammarian to make the otherwise excellent stories more understandable. Not using words like "you're, your, to, too, there, their, they're" and similar words properly takes up valuable time trying to understand your intention. Add the switching of proper names and it just nearly destroys an otherwise good plot.
Sincerely,
de Jay