The story has great potential, and it should have been longer. It's like the author's mind went blank after using a few repretitious sex scenes. A little 'exploration' would have been great. Unfortunately ther premise became rather boring and predictable after a few scenes.
I didn't like it very much. First, I couldn't believe that a group of dinner guests, some of them strangers to each other, had this game popped on them out of the blue. Second, the obvious negative reaction of one or two of them was ignored or not noticed. Third, there was no conclusion to the story. A story has a beginning, a middle and an end, and this story had a poor beginning, a weak middle and no ending. Rather pedestrian, to boot. In case anyone says, "Do better if you can," I would say I don't have to. The writer put this out and expects a response. The implied suggestion from this commentator would be to write it again taking the comments and working with them.
English
Where's the rest?
Great start but it just "stops". I kept looking for the next panel! MORE!
WOW
You really need to finish it.
i almost came
i want more atleast 5 chapters,
Please finish it
This story is great, but I really wish that you would finish it. Thanks
continue please
I know that you wrote this 5 years ago, but you need to finnish the story.
want more
I wish this one was a 17 pager like dive dive dive...great read, would have gotten 5 stars if story finished
Try Anything.
The story has great potential, and it should have been longer. It's like the author's mind went blank after using a few repretitious sex scenes. A little 'exploration' would have been great. Unfortunately ther premise became rather boring and predictable after a few scenes.
Good
I liked this, it is hard to make a group not be the same old thing time and again,
Sorry to say...
I didn't like it very much. First, I couldn't believe that a group of dinner guests, some of them strangers to each other, had this game popped on them out of the blue. Second, the obvious negative reaction of one or two of them was ignored or not noticed. Third, there was no conclusion to the story. A story has a beginning, a middle and an end, and this story had a poor beginning, a weak middle and no ending. Rather pedestrian, to boot. In case anyone says, "Do better if you can," I would say I don't have to. The writer put this out and expects a response. The implied suggestion from this commentator would be to write it again taking the comments and working with them.
Poker Prize
I was often the prize to be played for at my boyfriends poker games...this game is too contrived.
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