All Comments on 'The Beast Inside Me Ch. 01'

This story has promise just need a bit of editing. If I was any good at it I would offer.

not worth a 2nd ch.

@ ariesgirl - Thank you very much. I am working on getting my future stories edited.

@ redlion75 - Could you please be a bit more specific? If you don't believe it is worth a second chapter could you please be actually constructive instead of just critical?

The editing is not horrible. I think u need to read it out loud to yourself till u get an editor. That helps.

Your story is promising. I think u shouldn't give up. It holds my interest which is saying something. If my attention is not captured the first few paragraphs. I can't read it. I want to know what he is. What she is. Where she is. And who is the woman in the picture.

Your story has potential, it DID NOT warrant redlion75's comment without him/her justifying their comment. Like wishmelycan said, read it out loud, you'll at least pick up on the missing words from sentences. keep writing, don't let ignorant idiots like Redlion75 bring you down.

i'm intrigued though I hope it goes beyond a situation based on trauma and rape. I will read part 2 and see about continuing. I hope you will tell us more about this word Braxton lives in and what he is.

the others were right my other comment was not warranted. as a non fan of rape stories(personal reasons) i was interested til then. being attacked by his pet then brutally raped just leaves a bad scene with no way to make it ok later.

BUT,,,like most have stated,,you really need an editor,or to read it out loud to find the missing or misplaced words,,,overall,a good start,,,,Will be glad to read chapter 2,hoping for 2 pages,,,please,,,,