Do you proof read? That and quite a few other sentences make no sense.
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Anonymous10/23/13
to anon below, can you not make any constructive criticism?
I think this is a great story, although as anon below said maybe some of the grammar and spelling could be sharpened up (although I missed that particular one)
I'm finding this story intriguing because is it not the usual fare. Yes, it's a valentine story but its born out of being stood up on one side and the other being raped - it feels a bit edgy at the same time as being romantic. So well done for creating that vibe.
Keep going, I'd love to hear more (how will Monica feel about this?? do we really care?)
English
'Soon enough he sank he was raping me'
Do you proof read? That and quite a few other sentences make no sense.
to anon below, can you not make any constructive criticism?
I think this is a great story, although as anon below said maybe some of the grammar and spelling could be sharpened up (although I missed that particular one)
I'm finding this story intriguing because is it not the usual fare. Yes, it's a valentine story but its born out of being stood up on one side and the other being raped - it feels a bit edgy at the same time as being romantic. So well done for creating that vibe.
Keep going, I'd love to hear more (how will Monica feel about this?? do we really care?)
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