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by Oldbear6310/18/13

Wonderful phrasing, Lesse

Too many to pick out favorites. "He felt his walls crumble, his feelings in cascade" really stands out for me as well as the rhyming without contrivence through out. Did you work on this for a while?

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by LesseloovesPeter10/18/13

You are too kind, Oldbear. I worked on it for maybe an hour late one night, later than I wanted to be up, which is why the ending is sadly abrupt.

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