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Whispered kisses across the skin

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by Anonymous

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by Angeline10/19/13

This is very good.

The voice is conversational and direct and honest. I think that underscores the eroticism and makes it come across more than a teasing or humorous tone would have. I'd maybe have a comma after "skin" in the penultimate line, but that's a really small thing, a nitpick maybe lol. Your writer's voice could not be stronger.

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by todski2810/19/13

very sexy

it seems like a feminine version of male thought, agree with the comma as opposed to the full stop, truly erotic,

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by greenmountaineer10/19/13

I'll echo the previous comments. I also liked the "oblique" way the poem started which I thought heightened the erotic tension in this delightful short piece.

Another quibble: it should be "for .... whom," but that may be more important for those of us who did little more than diagram sentences and read our catechisms in parochial school(LOL)

I don't get to New Poems lately as much as I would like because of growing eldercare issues, but this was well worth the trip.

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by Ashesh910/19/13

Whispered kisses 'cross the skin

Woman to woman ......
Great Sapphic poetry & nice to see you tear yourself away from the threads to post on New Poems ! 5-ed .

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by Oldbear6310/19/13

Thumbs soft across your nipples

Very sexy. A man could learn alot ...

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by GuiltyPleasure10/20/13

Mmmmm

silky smooth and honey sweet!. The sibilence in the title sets the tone. Well worth the wait.
Tess

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by butters10/20/13

so it is :)

tess linked me.

a delicate, very feminine poem, creating a hushed sense of tension - an open-ended moment leading to future discovery.

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