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This is very good.
The voice is conversational and direct and honest. I think that underscores the eroticism and makes it come across more than a teasing or humorous tone would have. I'd maybe have a comma after "skin" in the penultimate line, but that's a really small thing, a nitpick maybe lol. Your writer's voice could not be stronger.
very sexy
it seems like a feminine version of male thought, agree with the comma as opposed to the full stop, truly erotic,
I'll echo the previous comments. I also liked the "oblique" way the poem started which I thought heightened the erotic tension in this delightful short piece.
Another quibble: it should be "for .... whom," but that may be more important for those of us who did little more than diagram sentences and read our catechisms in parochial school(LOL)
I don't get to New Poems lately as much as I would like because of growing eldercare issues, but this was well worth the trip.
Whispered kisses 'cross the skin
Woman to woman ......
Great Sapphic poetry & nice to see you tear yourself away from the threads to post on New Poems ! 5-ed .
Thumbs soft across your nipples
Very sexy. A man could learn alot ...
Mmmmm
silky smooth and honey sweet!. The sibilence in the title sets the tone. Well worth the wait.
Tess
so it is :)
tess linked me.
a delicate, very feminine poem, creating a hushed sense of tension - an open-ended moment leading to future discovery.
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