It was good but you could have add some hot scenes to it.
by
Anonymous11/03/13
It was hot but also quite sad.
Has she even tried to make things more exciting for her husband? Has she tired to seduce him? Because so far, all she has done is let another man fuck her.
But..bottom line is that while she is getting off with her co-worker her husband is left out in the cold with a cheating slut for a wife....so, not much to enjoy here if you happen to be a husband.
Why would we want to read anymore stories where Carl and Barb fuck over an unsuspecting husband...want a good story, add some consequences, some revenge, and some BTB and kick Carl's ass stuff....then you got a story.
So far, this is essentially an Erotic Couplings story, because Hubby is just a concept which she feels a little guilty for cheating on. But not much, since he has never elicited the reactions her new Bull pulls out of her! If Hubby is not impacted in SOME way (positive or negative or simply 'differently from pre-tryst') then Hubby doesn't need to be in the story AT ALL!
The EC component of this series (Ch1 & Ch2) have been good - and hot, but unless this eventually becomes an LW story, my ratings will drop!
English
The story was advertising the labor diagnostic industry
Sperm detector home test or infidelity test may be a secret equipment for the husbands.
Not too bad
you need to punch it up a bit. Perhaps a bit of lesbian action.
It was good but you could have add some hot scenes to it.
It was hot but also quite sad.
Has she even tried to make things more exciting for her husband? Has she tired to seduce him? Because so far, all she has done is let another man fuck her.
Sure..a hot story, but
But..bottom line is that while she is getting off with her co-worker her husband is left out in the cold with a cheating slut for a wife....so, not much to enjoy here if you happen to be a husband.
A break
Give the husband a break...divorce him and let him find a women who'll be happy with a faithful husband.
Why
Why would we want to read anymore stories where Carl and Barb fuck over an unsuspecting husband...want a good story, add some consequences, some revenge, and some BTB and kick Carl's ass stuff....then you got a story.
Non-involved Hubby
So far, this is essentially an Erotic Couplings story, because Hubby is just a concept which she feels a little guilty for cheating on. But not much, since he has never elicited the reactions her new Bull pulls out of her! If Hubby is not impacted in SOME way (positive or negative or simply 'differently from pre-tryst') then Hubby doesn't need to be in the story AT ALL!
The EC component of this series (Ch1 & Ch2) have been good - and hot, but unless this eventually becomes an LW story, my ratings will drop!
Good story, nice hard edge to it, more soon I hope!
Et too Brutus ?
"1*" !
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Barb Becomes a Sex Toy Ch. 02 or
More submissions by Brutus813.