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Another weak "First Time" story
The characters are inadequately developed, to put it mildly.
Much of the text makes no sense - completely unrealistic
Good use of cooking ideas; almost bad ending
This would make a good love story if redone. Our hero is a man of integrity who cooks-which is rarefy in these stories. This story is more than just sex and I agree with those who say it's not developed-it has great potential to be more than a sex story . How does he find out her talents? show us her potential as a business woman..
I was disappointed with the ending. It could have been much stronger and forceful. Fast forward to her opening her own store, for instance..
The new watercress at Abby's -shows the guy as just another cheap prick. The author should save that for another story..
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