All Comments on 'The Opium Den'

I thought this was well written, and although I find myself unable to determine a real story or point, I found it entertaining, especially the early scene in the car when laura plays with emily under her sundress (btw love the name emily). Could've had a more gripping intro but all together I commend you, keep it coming!

I found it hard to keep tract of who was doing what too whom. Too much activity in a kind of jumble.

Keep trying.

Useful comments, and I appreciate the time you took to read the story and make them.

K