Maybe one of the worst stories I have ever read here. This is erotic? On what planet? Go back in your mothers basement dipshit. 1* Non Consent Rape
That's the only solution.
fuck the whore, kill the dumb ass that wrote this shit.
Pretty much sums it up.
You could at least of attempted to make a story out of it..
How do you write such garbage ? Get a life and stop writing. You are a sad human to put this trash together!
every day he finds the worst story he ever read. Yet, he keeps coming back, dumbass!!!!
To offset the anon who gave it 5 because he commented on the comments and probably did not or could not read the story Putz. BTW This does not belong in LW Maybe Non Consent
Plausible, perhaps not the happeist tale I have read.
but not as bad as the idiot calling someone dumb ass, just a loser who tries to piss other people off with his no mind opinions.
This story was not great, but I'm so tired of seeing idiots bragging about their one star ratings of stories like this that I decided to fuck them over by giving it a five star rating. There was nothing wrong with the plot, and the story started well, but it began to drag toward the end. The characters had good potential, but you didn't really develop them enough. So, fuck the anon critics and keep writing. You have potential.
why was he so sure of the fuck? why was he so sure hubby wasnt dangerous in any way and didnt have a gun? why was he so sure there would be no cops due to blackmail and rape( drunk first and coerce after)? and why did she smile after fuck, put up no fight over blackmail, and of course the ring? hubby could easily find these guys and let military handle it(alot of brig time for them)
Well it works both ways dickhead. I'm going to fuck you and this crap author over by giving it a well deserved one star. There was nothing erotic about this story, the same dished out crap that has been dominating loving wives for some time now. Only scum like you would consider this five star writing, oh excuse me, you didn't rate the story just the comments.
The great battle of the annonymous 1 star, 5 star offset is hilarious. But I agree with the 1 stars, this story is complete gash, for a first time effort it was really crap. Do you have 3 different names because there are another 2 first time efforts released that are pretty much on par with this shit
I don't care how many stars who gives to who. The bottom line is if you wrote this or even enjoyed reading a little bit then you have something fucked up in your brain. This is about as cruel as you could possibly be to someone and I'd prefer to not associate with people who are fucked up and evil like that. Yeah if you like this kind of story it says a lot about the kind of person you are!
Another dickless wonder thinking its hot to have his woman stolen from him!!! PATHETIC!!!
I guess there are some who get off on the humiliation of their wives craving multiple me in a whore/slut setting. For those who do, it would be more effective if the tension of the husband were made a bigger part of the story. Is he really going through hell? What are his thoughts/options? Why is she going along with this when that was not her intent (or was it?)? Was this a setup? etc.
A good story has to be plausible aside from the problems of writing it. The whole story depends on a string of unlikely (read never gonna happen) incidents to get where it gets.
It just fails time after time after time. The writing isn't bad but the whole plot is a huge fail!
This was not only a pathetic story but was poorly written. You personally deserve a woman like this.
dead wives tell no lies, neither do oversized punks in uniform
This story is about as erotic and loving as a two train pile up. A complete load of nasty disrespectful shite. Disrespectful and humiliating to the reputation and good name of returning soldiers that they would behave like sex starved rabid dogs. Beside the one star there should be a black star for the worst story one has read for a very long time!
but he's a brit, so what do you expect? Not all british males are cucks you know. Some are gay.
He cares more about his wife's reputation than his marriage?
portraying soldiers as evil... not in proper category... Yet another story I wish I could assign a negative score to.
Quite early in the piece, wimpy tired-from-his-long-flight hubby could have made it clear to his wife that 'army boy' had disrespectfully threatened to fuck her.
But hubbyman said zilch.
I suspect that these kinds of story on Literotica by Zionist arseholes set on breaking down TRUE marriage and family ties......in order to bring down America ABC exalt Israel.
Guys it really isn't funny to ridicule or express ideas that are clearly the work of someone who suffers from serious mental health problems...Not the author mind you even if this is clearly the work of pure fiction for numerous reasons that are simply impossible in the real word.
I am of course referring to the typical, numerous and quite alarming comments left on here that seem to usually express either racist, xenophobic, homophobic and religious hatred to name only a few examples of the stupid and retarded mind sets of people who are either in serious need of medical and clinical help or are just too stupid to separate fact from fiction.
I would just ask the question what is it that seems to get you so upset and easily angry and why? I would also say that usually the reason for these reactions and views mentioned above inc racism and homophobia is usually you are trying to protest too much against something that is a little too close to home.
Please feel free to comment back with expressions and views that are either similar or exactly like those mentioned above and tell me what a loser I am and prove my point
After all I can lead a horse to water but I can't make it drink..similarly I can lead an idiot to culture yet I can't make you think!
story sucks no guy would put up with this and the woman is nothing but a whore. would have left her the minute she did anything and dumped her worthless ass no matter how much i loved her she clearly showed she didnt love her husband at all.
And, of course, what follows was moronic bullshit that demolished her reputation.
Also, do NOT write entire conversations as one paragraph. When the character talking changes, start a new paragraph. Have you ever read a book or story?
Poorly written and a stupid story is NOT a good combination.
Fidelity is an ideal and love is divine between two faithful people. Expressing negative feelings and opinions toward infidelity and spousal abuse don't make anyone racist or homophobic or anything else this moron can use to denigrate real people.
When the soldier made his first promise, iI started to suspect. After Sweetie and GI Joe had been dancing three songs in a row, I was sure! Yeah, Sweetie said she hadn't played 'five finger drills' Hubby's whole absence! Plausible! GI Joe was doing it for her! They set up the dinner plan, then he accosted Hubby at the club!
Part of the evidence is that Hubby did not drink nearly as much as GI Joe or Sweetie, but passed out quickly after Sweetie made them drinks! Mickey Finn! Yeah, he had a long flight, but he was worried for his wife and marriage! She had done Mark-Bull before, and maybe even a few of his squadron mates! She suggested they 'drop' Mark off, then got in the back seat with her Bull, then invited him in for a nightcap...on Hubby's first night home!
Hubby coulda, shoulda...1) told Sweetie that he was too tired to go out to dinner...or at least insisted 'no club!'. 2). asked the barkeep to send the bouncer over; 3) gone out toward the end of the third dance and told Sweetie he'd called a taxi to take him to a hotel, and would see her the next afternoon (jet lag); 4) gone by the kitchen first to get a big knife, then saved his wife who was being raped! Even if it WAS a setup, as Anon 'setup' suggested, Sweetie would pretty much not have much choice left than agree with a live Hubby over a dead 'Massive-Meat Major!'
3*. Well-written and effectively presented, despite painful wimpiness!
do not know anyone who would do what you wrote you must be a sick person.
your dream must be to be a chuck stop writing
But generally an author won't do this for a first story. It was very disturbing in its own way (and not erotic). I can only imagine a wife of 10 years doing this if she were drugged or if she was already cheating with the guy and decided to bring it out into the open. My gut feeling is there are three choices in this type of situation.
Hubby can try the police, to see if blackmail or other charges might stick. Or he can just leave his wife (i.e., file for divorce), if she really wants this slut lifestyle. Or finally (and maybe this will seem good for the BTB crowd), he can go postal (i.e., crazy) and take them all out. He could leave a note for parents/relatives before ending his own life. As this story goes, I lean more towards the one star category.
It's remarkable how much angst this rather poorly-written story has stirred up among people who must suffer from agonizing insecurities about something. A psychiatrist without a lot to do might have fun here.
I come from a proud military family and I love men in uniform. Your depiction of military men is wrong on so many levels. Not sure what you're trying to tell the audience. What you told me is it's you that's the cum sucking whore. Love, Bev
PS you're also a lousy writer.
You fags are just flooding out of the woodwork lately!!
Average story of a wife/whore. I thought the initial sex scene was okay but the hubby blindly going along with his wife fucking half the army is out there to say the least and i am not keen on humiliation. I do have to disagree with those who say it should be in non conscent as his wife is all for it.
Anyway who says a story has to be realistic, a lot of the BTB have more plot holes than Swiss cheese and they still get praise and high scores. 3*
IF THE HUSBAND IS SO WIMPY, EITHER HIS WIFE SHOULD DUMP HIS SORRY ASS, OR HE SHOULD GROW A PAIR AND KICK HER OUT, ANYTHING ELSE IS PATHETIC
. ... Are you kidding me ! (us) ?! You have to be at least a budding psychopath to join the armed forces. If you're not already a psychopath, the US Army will sure as hell turn you into one: it is its fundamental MO.
And congratulations on the best job I have ever seen of pissing off the ‘real men’. I hope you researched the Loving Wives comments on cuckold stories prior to submitting. I hope you therefore were not surprised or too dismayed by the comments received. It was an amazing achievement, especially on your first story - unless you have already submitted under another name.
As you have stirred things up a fair bit, I think I will talk a bit about erotica and this story.
Erotica derives from the fantasies that we have – need to hold in our minds - to get hard, stay hard and cum.
Such fantasies tend to concentrate on what is forbidden. Fucking other people’s wives, fucking our wife’s friends and close females relatives, incest, other men fucking our wife etc. Each of us has different variants that get to us & it is one thing we cannot lie to ourselves about.
In such fantasies, fears of STD or pregnancy play no part. Nor do most concepts of decency.
Actual erotic stories tend to be more civilised and need a fair bit of reality to make them good stories and effectively erotic.
This story is designed for a very specific fantasy – the cuckold where the husband ends up helpless, though not actually enjoying it.
Not, as it happens, my own preference but fair enough.
As often is the case in stories where the wife strays, the wife’s character is not really developed and her subsequent reactions not made real – she just switches from a normal woman to a strange creature, lost in her lust – actually pretty much like a man in that respect.
Shorter paragraphs would have helped as would character development for husband and wife, particularly after the fall.
Overall, very creditable first story. Please keep writing
Please write a chapter two with all the intimate details of Julia's gangbangs. We know she absolutely loves it, although she would never tell her husband that. She has to ultimately get pregnant from these guys. Have these guys start visiting Julia's house, all hours of the day and night. The husband is forced to watch and listen, and to add insult to injury, is forced to thank the guys for taking such good care of his wife, since he is obviously unable to. Keep going! I can hardly wait!!!
Not necessarily excellent writing, since a little more character development would have helped a lot. But outstanding job pissing off the anon assholes who get so damned fired up over fiction. It's great to see you tweak the shit out of them. Keep up the excellent work!
Five stars for sure, if not for the writing itself, then for the impact you are having!!
Can't see anyone in his right mind staying on after that, but it's your fucked up fantasy....may you live to see it happen to you.
On pissing off so many people.
Wow, lots and lots of angry readers. So angry, I suspect, that the real reasons for their anger have not been adequately expressed. For my part, I am worried that the author of this story is setting an unwelcome precedent in taking things to a new 'low' - even for the Literotica Category it rightly or wrongly has been placed. Ideas and imagery, once out in the ether or cyberspace, or even for that matter, just inside one mans head, are very powerful for good or evil.
I am reader name 'valerian', by the way,.... not 'Anonymous'.
Reader name: valerian ( not Anonymous).
It's so blindingly obvious that the vast bulk of the hateful comments left on cuckold stories are written by men who got off on reading them, then, after shooting their wad, found themselves awash in feelings of guilt and confusion. Perhaps their cocks are small; perhaps their wives and girlfriends cheat on them; perhaps they're closeted and confused by their fantasies of sucking cock and swallowing other men's come. I know one thing for sure: they wouldn't keep reading them if they didn't get off on them, and they wouldn't get angry if they weren't conflicted about it. It's kind of adorable.
Blackmail isn't sexy, or exciting. Neither is putting a woman in the hospital. I LOVE cuckold stories, but this just makes me sad.
If this wasn't about getting off, I'd want the Husband to dumb the whores ass n divorce her no matter how much he was in love with her.
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