Through My Eyes Ch. 01

What!!!

it's gr8 but u can't leave it like that give us more or atlases me

Great start. Looking forward to part two, but you might want to look in to getting a editor.

Very good start. You gave a good idea of the characters and the situation. I did see several typos so an editor or proofreader would help. I look forward to reading more.

Please get an editor, apart from your own intro where you wrote 'knew' instead of 'new', there are glaring errors like this one: "I met Rose when I when we were in middle school". it's just badly written.

Thanks!!

Okay so I didn't proof read this chapter, sorry for that. I was excited to get it posted. I will proof the next chapter which I am working on now. As far as getting an editor I have tried that and none of them respond. Thanks for the comments.

I'll come back when you've finished the story - I don't want to start reading this if there's a chance you'll just give up, like you did with your first story.