All Comments on 'Against Daybreak'

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LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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An interesting read whose long lines distract;

Shorten lines {w/o much changing of words}

Also group words into strophes;

Together such changes will have a positive effect.

duddle146duddle146about 17 years ago
light

Sometimes by Dawn's early light ~ thing aren't as they seem.

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