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A Comfortable Pair Of Shoes

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by Anonymous

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by tazz31701/05/14

OLD SHOES AND CLOTHES ARE COMFORTABLE

but to break in new ones is difficult, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous01/05/14

lol

first LW story i've read that i enjoyed. thanx.

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by betrayedbylove01/05/14

Excellent

The wife was a real fucking cunt. I hope she goes to goodwill to buy her clothes now.
Ha ha ha

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by Anonymous01/05/14

Worth a great 5+*

Thank you for a very enjoyable story, its like taking a 'breath of fresh air' here on Lit, please keep writing.

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by Sid060401/05/14

Thank you

I enjoyed reading your story... as usual.

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by LordSlamdawgg01/05/14

Using Colloquial Language, Incomplete Sentence Structure & Freely Interjecting Slang in Story is a Double Edged Sword !

It's very effective is used correctly but can go wearisome & bad in proverbial quick hurry. Only the very best ( Faulkner, Welty ) and worst ( don't deserve to be listed ) opt for extended salt of the earth vernacular. How did it work here for qhml1 ?

*****

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by starmanfive01/05/14

I liked the concept

We need more action/consequences stories. No one can do whatever they want with out paying a price somewhere.

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by Drbeamer333301/05/14

Loved it

A brilliant little tale. Five stars.

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by MitchFraell01/05/14

Excellent

No cruel or unusual punishment. She was warned and got what she deserved. Liked it.

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by bobby990901/05/14

Please write more of these.

Absolutely enjoyed this great little tale. Please sir, may I have some more?

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by TheUnoriginalist01/05/14

Fun but vapid

Fun, for a meaningless little thing. Like the LW equivalent of watching a cartoon or eating Cheetos.

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by dinkymac01/05/14

Nice.

Thanks for sharing.

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by Duna01/05/14

5*****

Good consequence story.

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by chasten01/05/14

Enjoyed this one!

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by Pulsifer4201/05/14

Well done

Nice to realize that occasionally justice prevails over evil wrong doing. Thanks

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by laptopwriter01/05/14

Just like the character...

a no-nonsense story, well written and strait to the point. I loved it.

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by kakashi52401/05/14

Short, but...

...very well done. Though there was a need for a editor, a few mistakes here and there. 5 Stars.

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by Jounar01/05/14

Great story and one very expensive "pair of shoes" :)

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by Anonymous01/05/14

Two stories the same day.

As always both enjoyable entertaining reads. Given the trash that's being dumped into loving wives lately these are a welcome diversion. Thanks for good reading. 5*

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by Anonymous01/05/14

Fun story with realistic characters - 5 *

I liked this story much better than the other one you submitted today. Both characters were real. Most husbands can relate to the sentiments of the husband. The wife was a little to simple but its a 2 page story. Thanks for spoiling us. Can we count on lots more from you in the future?

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by Harryin VA01/05/14

GOOD story but counselling seesion makes NO sense

This author often writes really very good stories and this one is no exception but there is one problem with the story that really irks me. And again this is just my own personal opinion

They are in the counseling session right ?... And he is telling the counselor about how the wife has changed ...about how she appears to be fooling around and sneaking around behind his back. Then he drops in the fact that the vacation resort place the wife wants to go to visit in Cancun is a SINGLES place and that it caters to the alternate lifestyle.

What is the counselors reaction to those Facts ? It's obvious that intelligence and determination that the husband has proof that this is where the wife is going to go with her slut friends in Cancun. This is not just a statement of fact but it is a bombshell !!! Surely there has to be some sort of reaction from this bombshell that the husband drops in the counseling session.... No???

But instead of finding out the counselor's reaction or the wife's possible explanation in a counseling session..... instead in the very e next paragraph the back together again. This makes no sense.

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by Saxon_Hart01/05/14

If this was in your leftover pile....

I can imagine the great stuff in the to be published pile. Good stuff here I loved it 5* from me!

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by Anonymous01/05/14

Really Nice

Really, really, really nice.

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by Anonymous01/05/14

2 POVs = 1 Star

You keep shifting from wife point of view and the next paragraph to the husband's point of view.

That's not way to write a good story. For that I rated your story a 1 star. If there was a zero, I would have selected that!

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by gatorhermit01/05/14

Tow Q stories in one day!

This woman could have been one of Stang's psycho first wives (which is intended as a compliment). Well written little story.

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by alex_cross01/05/14

Simple and too the point

I loved it! Here is a guy who knows his mind.

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by Anonymous01/05/14

I think I liked this story.

I'm not sure why he took her back the first time. You made it clear, when he made up his mind he NEVER went back. I'm positive she would have NEVER signed the post-nup. And the ending, even after reading it 3 times, left me wondering.
Did he have a girl friend? A second wife? Where did she come from, the office? Did his ex-wife marry well and that's why they don't travel in the same circles? Why would his ex-wife go to therapy? She continued to lead her life, on her terms throughout, why would she feel any change necessary? I like your writing, but this story simply had too many questions left unanswered for me to really enjoy it.

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by Lickideesplit01/06/14

@Anon '2 PoVs'

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Dumbass Anon-2pov: The ONLY PoV was Hubby's!!! There IS a long QUOTATION from Sweetie (as Hubby overheard it) which HUBBY reported. It MIGHT have been formatted differently, such as surrounding at start and end with a line of asterisks, BUT it was clear (if the reader was paying ATTENTION.) So ... ZERO stars for your comment!
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The story is delightful! QHML1 has NOT written below 4* since third grade! The only awkwardness is towards the end, where Hubby goes off to buy shoes, which segues into his eventual new pairing and suggests Sweetie2 has been with him for several decades. Then the author drops back to the 'main tale' timeline to diss the 'Counseling Judge!' Considered how to suggest a revision which would alleviate this awkwardness ... no great surprise - I could NOT think of a way I thought would improve on the original!

5* (because we can't give 7*)

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by MattblackUK01/06/14

You found 5* Gold!

A good read, thanks.

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by Anonymous01/06/14

CINCO ESTRELLAS

MAKE MY DAY

Vanderdecken

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by overthehillmedic01/06/14

Very Classy

Like they say" don't know why I married her. The same ting I said about my first wife.
Thanks for a good story!

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by john194601/06/14

OK

Now that was a fun little story

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by Anonymous01/06/14

refreshing

really good nice pace

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by FullCircle5601/06/14

Great Story

Agree wholeheartedly!! This was a fun story. Last paragraph said it all!! Had to laugh with him. 5 stars just for that.

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by FD4501/06/14

Editing errors aside

I liked this story better than the Tee one.

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by Anonymous01/06/14

Really lame, not up to your usual standards.

Stories where the wronged party, ie the cuckolded husband, gets the (newer and hotter) girl, the gold watch and everything are...a dime a dozen on LW. And they are, generally speaking, unenjoyable. Not only does it detract from the realism of the story, it steals from the effort you put into the characters. After all, life rarely comes up roses for divorced men, regardless of how much they get fucked over by their wives.

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by Anonymous01/06/14

enjoyable

I enjoyed this story. Good short one. The format was a bit cookie cutter, but the content was very good, as usual from you. It drew several chuckles and smiles from me.

It is such a treat to see new postings from you. There are very few writers on this site who have as much talent as you.

-Wild Bill

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by Anonymous01/08/14

in spite of 'really lame' earlier, this story....

....somehow makes the world a little more tolerable. That the guy doesn't get completely screwed over, in addition to getting cheated on. That the cheater gets nothing except what the leaving spouse offers out of decency (decency the cheater didn't offer when she could have), is just another dig for the ADD shits that can't or won't be honorable and break things off before 'expanding their horizons'.
I can't stoop to saying this story makes all right with the world, that would make me as lost as some of these characters. But it feels like someone, somewhere else can see their way to justice and honor in such a mess.

Not going to offer any criticisms, since anything I could offer would be dealing in trivialities. The editing and fine work have been quite good.

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by chytown01/09/14

Good Read***

Thanks for sharing.

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by Anonymous01/10/14

great

1 star rate

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by BTTap01/11/14

Excellent

Really good short story. Author developed the narrative in a great way (it's a simple, standard, cheating wife recovery fantasy, really; been done on this site 1000+ times), and my feelings about the husband/protag changed at least 2 or 3 times throughout. Character development was excellent, for both husband and wife. Made this one a favorite.

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by carvohi01/15/14

Fun!

He's a good guy. He gave her every break. She just didn't get it. Another five.

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by Tavadelphin02/05/14

Priceless fun

It read sow well - he got to the end and knew it then just moved on -

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by Fiftyshadesofme02/14/14

:)

Hahaha I laughed so much.

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by Mustang88LX02/16/14

That was good

Thanks

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by fanfare03/01/14

T.P.ing the courthouse

I cannot remember who recommended that all judges should keep a roll of toilet paper in front of them next to their gavel. To remind themselves that they are only human.

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by chilleywilley03/20/14

Excellent!

Can't think of anything to criticize. Very good

Chilley

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by Anonymous03/29/14

not as smart as he thought

Should have sent her to the curb the first time......nothing changed

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by Oldpart04/09/14

Nice

I think this is the best of this type LW story I've read. 'course I ignore the nitpicking comments of some.

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by scalinghammer04/24/14

PostScript

The postscript was the best part for me. Good story but great ending.

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