All Comments on '99: Buttered Words'

Has arrived, brought your poetry to life, this is outstanding Harry

I can take it no more & sink into your day .......

Killer lines , Harry & welcome baaaack !!!

beautiful. There are a couple of places you might delete a word or two which would make your internal rhyme a bit neater. ( I didn't count the words but I am guessing there are 99)

a lovely poem for a beautiful day ! enjoyed the read immensely. Definitely worth a five.

~ NJ

all of it, the fluidity, sound-links that tie it together throughout, simply stated imagery, a building of quiet tension/passion - but the pinnacle resides in those final lines:

implores a pearl to become a sun and when dawn breaks at last.

I can take no more and sink into your day.

it doesn't get any better than that, harry. omg x

enjoyed the whole journey, but the final lines were, well - sheer poetry.

IN RE YOUR "WORDS POEM" THE TVE HAD ON A PERV WHO TOOK ADV ANTAGE OF PASSED OUT LADIES. ASSUMING THE CONSENUAL OKness OF THIS ACT THE POEM IN ITSELF HAD CONNOTATIONS AND ENTENDRES, OVERALL IT WAS GOOD. I CHOSE NOT TO PUT THESE INTO THE REALM OF OPENESS FOR ALL. RESPECTFULLY TK U MLJ LV NV

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The two people in this poem are lovers, one is awake the other merely asleep, apologies if anyone thought this was non consensual, would make a good point to put in a pre-nuptial, 'both parties agree to free use of their bodies while asleep.' idk

Love it.

porn poppy (nether lips, etc.)

this line:

implores a pearl to become a sun and when dawn breaks at last.

is surely a line to run with

if fact some of the things you do come up with would make me jealous....

...if i was a writer