Stones

Very lovely carving you've made here.

Liked a lot

Really liked where you took it, Todski

Tod , lemme' quote a translated Bengali lyric on this subject to you :

If you carve your name in stone , it may still decay
But if you imprint your name in the hearts of people
It will forever endure 'n stay !

I liked the word play, tod, and the interspersing of the rhymes with the short lines gave it a cadence I liked, what felt like persistence until the chipping away produced the vision one has of beauty. I wouldn't have used "chaff," maybe rubble.

Would have missed this save for 12 o's

Comment in the POBO. Agree that chaff does not fit with masonry in any shape or form. understand why you used it. It's been a long time since the first of yours I've seen, one involving carpentry if I remember correctly. Words can be wood or water or air or any number of things, but I think that words have become life to you... to us all in fact. idk. chip away, sand, breathe, drink... write.

I liked your defense

I don't know if I agree
however if it makes sense to you, writer always takes preference
regarding the poem, it is an old troupe, but you are a new writer, and it it not that ordinary
5ed

I got

Nothin'. I liked it and chaff worked for me.