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And the point to this is what?
You set up a scene for a potential explosion and then just leave it unresolved. What actually happens out of all this?
I won't go into the spelling mistakes like heals instead of heels.
Boy
That was pointless.
Why did you even bother giving your characters names when you couldn't be bothered to make them into anything more than cardboard cutouts?
Hell, you couldn't even bother deciding if Rebecca was his wife or girlfriend.
One star because there's nothing lower.
Pointless
Complete “waste” of time!
and then...
Come on, how could you leave it there!
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