If you bite a woman's clit she will scream but not from pleasure. You might also get hurt in a lot of different ways. Maybe a broken neck.
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Anonymous11/21/13
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Gave you one star for calling your critics assholes in the other story. What a prick you are.
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Anonymous11/21/13
Get some help
Firstly, you might want to verify some of your sexual acts with a female. Several times your written act would have caused pain and not pleasure.
Secondly, you are making some really basic spelling and grammatical errors. Enlist the help of a regular writer from literotica.
1. You can bite a girl with out pain. I should know. Ask my wife.
2. I proof read and spell checked every thing in this. Therefore there should be no spelling errors. Grammar is a possibility though. No one is perfect with grammar.
3. It got a 4.0 rating so I don't want to hear it.
4. You can be a critic with out being a dick about it. Instead of saying it is terrible, give advice on what I could change. ASSHOLE!!!
The people who did enjoy this story let me know if you would like another chapter, and who you would like to see in it. I'm always looking for ideas that would make the readers (not the assholes) happy and enjoy it even more. Thank you.
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Anonymous02/11/14
Just read it
Why proofread? Just read it and masterbate Mr. Editor.
English
Get real
If you bite a woman's clit she will scream but not from pleasure. You might also get hurt in a lot of different ways. Maybe a broken neck.
.
Gave you one star for calling your critics assholes in the other story. What a prick you are.
Get some help
Firstly, you might want to verify some of your sexual acts with a female. Several times your written act would have caused pain and not pleasure.
Secondly, you are making some really basic spelling and grammatical errors. Enlist the help of a regular writer from literotica.
Please
Stop this shit now, my fucking eyes are bleeding!
1. You can bite a girl with out pain. I should know. Ask my wife.
2. I proof read and spell checked every thing in this. Therefore there should be no spelling errors. Grammar is a possibility though. No one is perfect with grammar.
3. It got a 4.0 rating so I don't want to hear it.
4. You can be a critic with out being a dick about it. Instead of saying it is terrible, give advice on what I could change. ASSHOLE!!!
The people who did enjoy this story let me know if you would like another chapter, and who you would like to see in it. I'm always looking for ideas that would make the readers (not the assholes) happy and enjoy it even more. Thank you.
Just read it
Why proofread? Just read it and masterbate Mr. Editor.
It was ok
Needs maybe another page, also it seems rushed
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