...It was a good "true life" description of an event, but the interest was lacking, I basically was looking to know A LOT more about Evelyn and why she was saying some of the things she did in the story, it was more joe friday than such a delicate story deserved, which was romance, on the other hand it seemed like good contexting, and very well editted - gave it a 4 as it showed promise.
Works better as a vignette than a first entry into a series
I really liked the tone and emotive quality of the encounter, but it needs a lot more character and plot development in order to translate into a series.
Don't get frustrated, though, and don't listen to asshole commentors who post anonymously. It's really quite humorous that someone so obviously ignorant of the appeal of these stories would read the entire thing and then take the time to post a comment if they didn't enjoy at least some part of it. I'm a straight guy and I love these kind of stories, as long as the main character isn't being force-feminized.
I too like the stories where character first and sex second. The first time description was - exciting to read. I was pleased with the reading. Looking forward to reading part two.
English
Nicely written.
First love, well done. A story filled with love and passion. I hope it's the start of a lasting relationship.
Loved this
This is a fantastic story. Loved the detailed descriptions and the tendernance of the sex scenes.
Beautiful story!
I luv the first time experience stories! It's so special when a gurl is seeded by her man!!!
I Liked Your Formatting...
...It was a good "true life" description of an event, but the interest was lacking, I basically was looking to know A LOT more about Evelyn and why she was saying some of the things she did in the story, it was more joe friday than such a delicate story deserved, which was romance, on the other hand it seemed like good contexting, and very well editted - gave it a 4 as it showed promise.
Beautiful
What an exciting story.
Rebecca
Works better as a vignette than a first entry into a series
I really liked the tone and emotive quality of the encounter, but it needs a lot more character and plot development in order to translate into a series.
Don't get frustrated, though, and don't listen to asshole commentors who post anonymously. It's really quite humorous that someone so obviously ignorant of the appeal of these stories would read the entire thing and then take the time to post a comment if they didn't enjoy at least some part of it. I'm a straight guy and I love these kind of stories, as long as the main character isn't being force-feminized.
Well done
I too like the stories where character first and sex second. The first time description was - exciting to read. I was pleased with the reading. Looking forward to reading part two.
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