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Lovely, 5*
What more can I say, please continue with their story.
The biggest error was this was not long enough, maybe you can do an epilogue.
There was an error with the muffins. You wrote red velvet when Krys was getting the muffins but stated chocolate chip after he sat down with Aurora to eat.
GOOD START
It was a good start,i think in the wrong catagory,but it really needs more chapters,and maybe an editor,a few errors,but nothing that would hinder the reader from understanding,,keep up the good work,,
Thank you
I enjoyed reading your story. A Part 2 would be good.
Amazingly romantic
This also could've been Non-Human.
more fitting for non human than romance
Gotta say this feels more suited to non human or erotic coupling than romance. Really didn't feel romantic at all to me, far to quick from meeting to fucking, no courting...
So so story
Well written but a few problems
1.ur story is about a bbw with white thighs/calves?
2. Red velvet muffin became chocolate chip.
3.Non human story tagged as romance.
4.Unbelievable reaction to finding out the guy you slept with after a single date is a wolf.
5.You are clean so you cant get an std from a guy you met a few hrs ago.
6.Haven"t we read similar stories over and over again?
This is not to in anyway to discourage you or diss your story, but to make the next chapter better!!!
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loved it!
This is such a sweet romantic story! Thank you for posting this. Would love to read more from you. ^-^
Too much to fast
Here is my biggest problem, the entire story happened in fast forward. Slow down and stretch out some of those ideas, make the reader work for some of the information
love the story
I like the concept and would love to proofread for you if you would like
Liked the story
Great sbort story, humorous twist. Thanks
A different kind of delightful!
Great story! How about a ch. 02?
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