First Time

Wow, Lesse

You captured it so vividly. Just spent 10 minutes trying to separate what I think it was like and and what was the actual. You hit embarassingly close to the mark. Lucky you didn't have poison ivy. Sigh

you are a very good writer

what saves potentially fatal material (all material is potentially fatal) are the asides
the mosquitoes
and that is a damn good ending
I applaud your commenting on others material
high 5

Lesse : praise from 1201 on this website is a

Gold standard ISO 2001 validation !!! Need i comment further ??

I am humbled by y'alls high opinion of my writing. It's a gift, 10000 hours be damned, I was born with it. Words just come out. I can't stop them. It's nice to have them appreciated, you guys have no idea.

ash exaggerattes

greatly
the real trick is in edit
and when not to write
you will master that. i see it already beginning

Very nice poem

I agree that that mosquito theme raises this poem above the crowd. Nicely done.