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Sabina and her master
Realistic and arousing. I felt I was there with Master as he really enjoyed injecting his seed in Sabina's moist virgin pussy!
The magical and instantaneous transition from badass warrior chick to gibbering "i'm only eighteen!" retarded noble woman was unbelievably poor writing. What the fuck?
Seemed a bit rushed but an okay story
Thank you
Well done.
A decent first story to pop your literary cherry.
Then ending was a bit abrupt, and you could have left it open to show her life in the following months, but it's your story.
Thank You
I welcome all comments and observations both encouraging and critical. I'm not a professional writer I'll never be a professional writer but I enjoyed writing it. Might even try another!
This was pretty good. A very nice first submission and here is hoping you post more. I did really like how she didn't instantly fall in love with her master.
good job!
Great story :) A bit rushed in the end though. Hope you continue writing!
Her argument of I'm only 18 is out of place since then most married young and by her age could already have had 1-2 kids, it wouldve made sense had this been modern time
GOOD JOB
I enjoyed your story. I disagree with another comment. I like a story to end. I am not fond of the chapter stories you often find here. I did agree about the 18 thing though I understand you wanted to make it clear that she was an adult. Nice job
For a first story, it's pretty good, although there was a lot of historical inaccuracies. I know you said that it wasn't a historical essay, but anyone who has taken an ancient civ class in college could tell you that at the fall even the Germanic tribes were Christians.
A shame it ended abruptly - I would have liked to see her as a slave. It was still a hot story.
Protecting your Christian innocence...
I like how the subject attempted to protect her Christian virginity.
However, would like to have read more about how she tried to keep her ravenous heathen from pushing his penis into her innocent virgin pussy, which a man had never viewed before.
Could see her saying, "...I'm a Christian virgin. I've never been with a man. I want to save myself for my husband...." as he slowly slides it in before his hard pagan cock pierces her holy hymen.
Then would love to see the expression of joy on her face as his hungry penis pushes deeper and gives the naive Christian maiden all those sensations she's never felt.
To allay her pregnancy concern, perhaps she could've asked him, before he entered, to promise to pull-out "just in time" before his cum flowed.
"oh... okay... I will (maybe)..." he responded.
"That will help me maintain my good girl Christian innocence," she responded.
After about 10 minutes of going in and out of her and thrusting deep into her Christian pussy with his passionate thrusts, she feels his heathen penis beginning to spasm, so she knows it's time for him to fill her.
As he begins to withdraw, she surprises him by wrapping her arms around him even tighter than she held him before, which prevents him from pulling out.
As he's past the point of no return, he can't hold-back anymore and she feels his sperm-laden cum filling her.
"mmmmm...." she tells him as she kisses his lips passionately and clearly enjoys having her innocent Christian pussy filled with his ungodly cum.
"I... though you didn't want to have a baby...."
"I know I TOLD you that, but I love the feeling and want ALL OF YOU! !!!" so please don't stop. I'm your's for the entire night...."
"...and life..." the master informs here...
Didn't believe she was an innocent virgin..
The heathen master had likely been with other Christian maidens & helped "introduce" them to the world of sex. Perhaps he had reason for skepticism as some who told him they were "innocent" weren't so and he knew it when his penis so easily slipped into the cunts without the slightest bit of resistance, tightness or blood...
One time after the woman assured him she was virginal, his penis quickly slid in.
After he fucked her and thrust his cum into her, he slapped her and chastised her for playing the innocent Christian maiden... so it was a serious thing to him and this virginal maiden had no idea what could happen if he suspected she wasn't so innocent...
Can picture his rock-hard pagan penis poised in front of the innocent Christian girl's pussy, his forehead just touching her opening and moments from forever robbing her of her Christian innocence.
She's nervous and breathes heavily as it will be her first time because no man has ever seen her beautiful Christian pussy, which will soon be all his.
You sure you're an innocent virgin? he asks.
Yes, master. I give you my innocence....
As he slowly moves it in, he notices how tight this 18 y.o. virgin is and feels resistance when his forehead touches her Christian hymen, which he will soon burst and forever take her innocent virginity....
As he does what any man should do to break-in his woman, she holds him tight and kisses him as he moves in and out and makes her a woman, a Christian woman living in the real world...
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