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Night Wings

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by Anonymous

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by Ashesh911/17/13

One Poet's take on

Twilight !

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by twelveoone11/17/13

summoning

lacks a little
i.e. Bring on the bats. Bring out the bats
even Summoner of the bats
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by LesseloovesPeter11/17/13

I like it.

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by Oldbear6311/18/13

Simple - sinister

Glad you didn't feel the need to take it further.

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by butters11/20/13

liked this

small but big. like the end line though 12's idea of 'bring on the bats' makes a little more punch there. my only problem, a minor one, is the 'bleeds' thing . . . we've all used it, it's a very fitting conceit, but i just feel i've read it too many times and so it feels a little stale.

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