by Stargodiss
Loves expressions of love - but help me understand the really short lines?
unless other wise indicated, merely mean the absence of long lines.
Brevity can be a virtue
both in width
and length
I like the shape the short lines give the piece, something soothing about it.
If you had done one of two things, with the ending,
either
Together
I am
Forever
Yours,
or
Together
I am
Yours Forever
you would have highlighted a rhyme, and either one of those ways is what I was expecting, since you wrote it inverting the line at the end avoiding an end rhyme or an enjambment rhyme, it highlighted it for me.
Thank you for the comments!
The way it is worded and put into shorter lines keeps each line with a separate meaning and also a combined meaning with the short surrounding lines as well. Every break in line is a pause that has meaning. Some of the lines do not join as others do and those lines complete one set of thoughts before moving into the next set. It is written this way intentionally to fully express the meaning in every word and every thought. It took a long time to get the placement of the words just right, to say exactly what I wanted to say. Sometimes less words, placed intentionally, can carry much more meaning behind them :)