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too short...
can't fap to this... :(
Could get better
Is she going to cock tease the hell out of him?
Getting there...
I am still liking your story. I think you are getting there. It is hard to write a lot at first. 'We' do love longer. However, I see a pattern on how you are breaking it up. Do your thing. It will all work out. I can't wait to read the next one.
Passion and Kisses xoxox
Thanks for the continued feedback
It's too short now but it will ultimately be about 8 chapters.
I feel the set up is necessary to establish the relationship. The remaining six chapters may or may not line up with your particular kink but they will involve more sex at least.
Chapter 3 has been submitted and will hopefully appear in a few days.
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