Christmas Came Early

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The author should go back to grade school to lern the basics again. All the use of "word -- word" along with the "..." indicate failed school. Makes the story appear written by some 8 year old.

Cheers Anonymous

You'd have to ask the site's conversion software why my original 'Word - Word' appears as 'Word -- Word' on screen...not how I typed it. But I will defend my use of dots to the death. It signifies a mental pause. Helps to control the flow of words into your mind, to reflect the characters speech pattern.
I'm glad that from the privacy of your bedroom, or wherever, you can express such grounded and insightful critique. I am doubly glad that the chances of you reading another story by me are less than zero.

Ignore that first Anonymous

I thought it was great!

I liked it! Good character presentation, attention to detail, effective use of sexual terms. Really turned me on ;)

Seriously??

To Anonymous on 11/28. How are you going to tell someone to go back to school to "lern" the basics when you don't know them yourself? So sad.

To the author: I enjoyed it. I wonder what you'll do for the New Year. :) Keep on writing. Your humor in this story was on point. I could just imagine the look of shock on the young delivery driver's face and then the look of satisfaction when he left. Merry Christmas to you!!!!

Great Story*****

Thanks for sharing this was very entertaining.

Your story

I like you short story quick style-no 3 paragraph description of the characters and really well thought out descriptions of the action