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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone11/23/13

nice little

metaphor
extended
but a bit of an exercise
WTF a 5

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by LesseloovesPeter11/24/13

hit the spots

Nice!

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by Tsotha04/28/14

Agreed, good metaphor. However, for an erotic poem, I feel that timing / padding / length / building anticipation is an important component. This is too short to really hit that goal, I think... Damn. Erotic poems are difficult.

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