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by beachbaby17912/01/13

Ah, yes...

... the one who got away. Please write chapter two. This is a very intriguing chapter 1. Well done!

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by Anonymous12/01/13

You chop and change points of view, one minute it's 'she', then 'I', pick a point of view and stick to it!

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by Gordan12/04/13

Thanks!!

Thanks for the input! I realized afterwards that I was mixing my tenses. Appreciate you guys reading the story.

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