Pussy Book Ch. 01

Decent start

It's an interesting premise, but I would suggest getting an editor. There are quite a few mistakes, and one point you say 'minutes before he blew his load,' followed by 'seconds later, he came.' Try to minimize discrepancies like that and you should be pretty well off, I would read more. Good work. Keep it up.

Good start and great story, continue with an editor though.