Fade Away

Only because of the last paragraph....

You got three. I've read convoluted revenge stories before but this was off the scale. You had the first wife slammed dunked with witnesses and you went all James Bond instead of just getting a divorce. Your hero would have to spend the rest of his life looking over his shoulder wondering if someone would recognize him. Then the hero would become a zero.

Thanks***

For the read.

gave 5*

but didn't really feel it deserved, very good writing though. Revenge not really believable.

Excellent

I am a full believer of extreme revenge. The cheating whore skank slut cunt wife got what she deserved. Her parents suffered, however. Unintentional as it was, it was a casualty of the revenge against the cheater. At least the new happy couple feel guilt over the actions. Five Stars

I don't understand why

when the cheaters were caught in the act by club personnel he didn't just get a divorce, stay in the community and embarrass the cheaters publicly by being a better person who rose above it all. Now they have to live in secret, with an assumed name, away from their family and friends, always worrying that they will be found out, and they did nothing wrong..

Wimp!

The husband in this twisted story was a dispicable wimp. He should have shoved his head up his own ass and suffocated to death.

IF ITS NOT TRUE DONT FADEAWAY

just Runaway and don't walk in the rain. TK U MLJ LV NV

Too Convoluted!

I like to "burn the bitch" as much as the next guy, but this was just 'way too weird. He set her up to be caught, and humiliated, so why not just divorce her ass?
As manager of her trust fund he could have justifiably paid himself a couple of million in management fee's, while making some really bad investments causing her trust to take some huge losses. happens every day, and it's perfectly legal.
(Big banks do it all the time, only they have hedge funds to cover their asses).
Anyway good triumphs over evil and that's always fun to read.

Well done

He was a bonafide wimp and a person that everyone liked. We can't all be karate specialists. It seems he got a devastating revenge but his former in-laws did not deserve their punishment.

Early in the story, when he is describing the choice between the two

ladies in his life, it is OBVIOUS he should have chosen Doreen. Even though we knew going in that this was a cheating revenge story, if the future cheating wasn't a factor, the choice, as laid out at that time, should have been Doreen hands down. Of course, reading the story, I began to think that the "REAL" revenge was going to be from Dory. She would split them up and leave him high and dry with neither of them, after leading him on for awhile. Instead, you took this in a different direction, and that was to send a message about revenge and guilt, and "the perfect revenge doesn't always garner the perfect result". Of course, it is easy to have a little guilt and manage it, when you still get to go home to a beautiful loving wife and child. If he knew he wouldn't have ended up with Dory, would he have executed his revenge on Melissa in the same way? Hell, I think if Dory was never in the picture, I think he would have forgiven Melissa, and gone to counseling to save the marriage. I think you were pretty clear with your message of revenge not always being as sweet as you envision it might be, but there should have been more accountability for the illegal actions, and when punished for breaking the law, hubby would realize that he could have or should have done more to save his relationship before just torpedoing it forever. The "Tom Sawyer" device of attending his own funeral (even by proxy) to find out what people really think of him hasn't been done in awhile, but it is hardly original. However, it does fuel the guilt angle pretty well, having him wonder "Was all this necessary? Could it have been avoided?" Again, if Dory hadn't been the consolation prize, we all know his actions would have been very different, and the face of his revenge, would have changed the entire tone of this story. How satisfying is reading a story where the characters seek justice, yet the REAL justice is never served? No character should ever be rewarded, after breaking the law, to serve their own selfish end! Just stuff to think about.......

Very original and entertaining

I don't understand how people can so vehemently criticize a story so original, especially since the character said right at the start what his failings were and then they proved to be true. There has never been a story with this theme on Literotica that I have found, and I thoroughly enjoyed it!

The moral of the story: Being a cry baby, not standing up for yourself and running from your problems are the cowards way out and will end up hurting everyone. It's a shame people are so scared of their own shadow that flight takes over all rational thought. I can't really give the man scorn as he really just deserves pity and that's a shame.

Fantasy

Some commenters forget that this is only fantasy. Don't worry, this story would never happen. But, it's still fun, great fun to read. The reason that it's fun is that in reality, the husband, after having his emotions shattered, would be financially taken to the cleaners. He would be vilified, by the cheating wife, to her parents, family and friends because he is so uncaring to her 'hormonal' problems. If he really loves her, he would 'work through' the problems. In this fantasy story, there are elements of realism. The slut wife ended up devastated. it was her social status that destroyed her. Nothing to do with love for her husband. This is why this fantasy is fun. It will never be real. The husband would loose half of all assets, plus hefty alimony to the poor dear, while she continues with her fuck buddy(s) In this fantasy, the opposite of reality occurred.

Fantasy

I concur with svg1's comments.

A fantasy and this is all there is to it. The characters are one-dimensional and therefore not endearing. The plot (meticulous planning, hi-tech gadgetry, CSI forensics etc. belongs to a Ocean's 11/James Bond hybrid movie, not the bland tale of a husband wronged by his wife. This glaring disparity of a typical male revenge scenario so often overused lends itself to be quite implausible, but hey it is a fantasy.

It's extraordinary to see the husband's miraculous and speedy recovery from his wife's deception, yet his own misdeeds far outweighs her dalliances and then some.

This will satisfy the scorched y-chromosome drones but it is nowhere near a Lit. staple...

Unbelievable!

One of the most unrealistic stories I've ever read!

Not enjoyable.

Not a particularly enjoyable story. Superficially well written but no real depth to the characters.
Having built the main character to be an honest, upright guy the author then turns him into a dishonest coward who goes into hiding for the rest of his life and who significantly hurts two people he claims to care for. Not the kind of person I would want as a friend.

Elaborate for elaborate's sake!

Why? He had the truth and sufficient evidence the first discovery, what with another eye-witness! I can kinda understand getting drunk. Suicide by airbag ... a sucky solution - as Hubby didn't get a chance to discover! Hubby did nothing wrong - and his suicide solution violates his own standards as presented earlier! But it DOES serve to feed into an unbelievable set of coincidences ... Doreen's folks HAPPEN upon him in serious trouble, and take him to their home to nurse a guy that shows the external signs of having a serious concussion! THEN it turns out Doreen is back in town AND on the 'available' market!

What follows is even weirder ... Hubby and his next Sweetie avoid the simple divorce plan (which would make Hubby much richer than he already is) and engage in a series of crimes which requires Hubby to abandon his established friends, significantly re-arrange his own financial nest-egg, and lose his identity at great risk of it coming unraveled at ANY time in the rest of his life! Do the new couple plan to include her parents as criminal co-conspiritors by letting them in on the false identity, or simply exclude them from their future, including their grand-kids?

Yes, it was an ambitious and bold plan by the author ... very elaborate. The impact of the couple's acts on Horny Sweetie are unclear, but it is hard to imagine that any such impacts were WORTH the amount of effort and degree of inconvenience and cost. Just divorce her ass, marry Doreen and vacation in the Alps!

BTW - Why the FUCK would Sweetie's Dad put Hubby in charge of Sweetie's trust fund, instead of keeping it himself? He could will that responsibility to Hubby upon his (and Mommie's) demise! Makes NO sense AT ALL! What her Dad would have demanded was a pre-nuptial!

3*

Which one is real...

Rambo, Superman, James Bond, an Honest Politician, or the Easter bunny?

None are real and all are a fantasy, just like this tale. A fun little read-way over the top, which is why it was so fun!

Thanks for posting

It started okay but when it turned to some extreme revenge you lost me

If he divorced her and their was no prenup he would have gotten a good settlement. It also seems his wife loved him but got over sexed at some point. So why the phony death and being declared dead just did not make any sense. Why transfer her assets over her screwing a guy. He could have done all that legally ,since no children were involved . Why all the drama. It was way over the top . You really killed this story.

Pretty weak

Story was just not all that interesting. Revenge stories obviously require the reader to suspend reality. But a fake suicide? Horrible. One can only suspend reality so much. Really a waste of a read.

One word!

Ridiculous.

Bill1104

Thanks for the effort.

Nice Try

Thanks for your effort, but this was too over-the-top to be believed. All stories must have some degree of believeability to succeed and this one just doesn't. Take some pictures, make them public for humiliation, kick the boyfriend's ass and get a divorce.

Hurt

With his false death he hurt too many people, as he muses at the end he should of just divorced her and moved on. Good writing but improbable plot. Thank You.

Why not just use a block of salt to hold down the gas pedal? Smugglers in Newfoundland used to use blocks of salt as weights for their stuff if they were stopped by customs.

Salt dissolves a lot better than exploded devices.

I liked that the people felt guilty. They did a shitty thing too, perhaps worse than the infidelity because it hurt far more people.

Yes, her act of infidelity was the HER action. HE had many actions he could have done...and he choose these. HIS actions caused additional pain outside of what she did. So yes, he is guilty of his lump of mud while still not deserving to be cheated on.

Would have liked to have met and understood Melissa and Doreen more. Doreen was a scavenger and has her own lump of mud to own.

Good Premise Hampered by ' Drama King ' lead character !

I'm all about karma chickens coming home to roost but this was over the top. Cheating is wrong but it's not 12 mill wrong. The guy's a complete narcissist to impose unneeded pain to blameless in-laws. The introduction was very slick, however, I enjoyed the slick contrast & compare process in choosing between the two women.

I'm a little peeved because there was a story that got left by the wayside about entitlement and class dividing lines . The narrator let Melissa's family money factor into his choice. The author opted out of that plot thread and gave us a hoary old pseudo-suicide with BTB resolution.

The potentially fascinating characters were paper mâché puppets to optimize a cliche. I might be a little too judgmental. imhapless wanted to have some fun rather then take on some weighty issues that he inadvertently raised in set-up process. This was a harmless read. As such, I'll refrain from voting & hope next time out this author feels a bit more ambitious.

Different

This story and it's outcome was definitely different, but in a good way. I liked the change of pace from the usual revenge scenarios on this site.

TOO MUCH

fantasy land for my tastes.

Not believable

I'm surprised I didn't enjoy this one. Not much about it was believable.

#2 COLLATERAL DAMAGE ALWAYS INFLICTS PAIN

the innocents are not immune no matter their good intentions. TK U MLJ LV NV

I like revenge on a cheater

But this was simply unbelievable. Too many things happened during his planned revenge that made him seem like James Bond. And many of them were unlikely to have happened. And I simply don't see how they lived with the guilt of their actions. Especially her parents. Good try but too implausible for my liking.

This was definitely BTB

I started rooting for the ex by the end, which almost never happens (although once in a while Stang writes a psycho first wife that elicits sympathy). Interesting story, but the revenge was over the top. Living well is the best revenge. However, I did like the story and found it to be interesting.

Somehow Lacking

It is an effective BTB story but something is lacking. Generally, a story of this ilk is guaranteed to have some unrealistic elements. Not a condemnation but a fact. This one seems to have too too many; the way he finds out originally, how he gets rescued the first time, the immediate complicity of ex-girlfriend, etc., etc., etc. 3*

He was certainly insensitive to what was around him -

Nit just conflict averse - but dense -

He knew people responded very well to him and he had a history of people liking him far more than one might expect - he SHOULD have had a clue about the impact such a plan might have -

While I generally do not care what the excuse is he never di let Melissa got it explained - she was not truly indiscreet or malicious - stupid, vain, incautious, disloyal, etc, etc - She did however clearly want only his child - if there had been some clause about having her husbands child by 32 or some such it might have felt different - as it was she was just a dumb bitch who could not keep her legs closed. She deserved to burn but not necessarily be incinerated along with her innocent parents.

But the devious plan was a fun one and a neat fantasy -

Great Story!

Enough said!!!!!

WHAT IFS AND SHOULDA-COULDA-WOULDA

leaves all lifes in turmoil. TK U MLJ LV NV

This was a blueprint for how to go from innocent victim to a repulsive villain in just 3 pages. He didn't deserve a happy ending. I liked the story, but I can't imagine a marriage that began with such deceit to life "happily ever after".

Walk away

Should have just walked away. Causing innocent people pain is not how a hero behaves. Hurt those who hurt you, yes. Causing more pain and suffering to those who love you than you makes your crime worse than the original.

What a pissy little bitch he was.

He had an obligation to the people who loved him, wifey not withstanding, to not take advantage of them. He was such a cunt that he let the bitter almost wife talk him into destroying the other people. Wife fucked up, deserved to be divorced and maybe have the shit slapped out of her for doing something like that for the reasons she fabricated and out in the open where they lived and spent their leisure time. Lots of marriages have one spouse with a higher libido that the other one and I would be willing to bet that they talk about it and come to some kind of resolution that doesn't involve a golf or tennis pro. But, since in LW land the first thing that the wife does is spread for one, two or three other men to resolve her issues, I guess this is true to form. Again but, the in-laws were good to him, loved him and trusted him. What he did was the equivalent of clubbing a baby seal. Too bad his foot didn't hang up in the car as it went over the side of the cliff.

Not Bad

While I also feel he should have confronted her openly, I don't have any real problem with the way he did it.

It's unfortunate that others had to suffer, but sometimes there is collateral damage.

Just Sex?

Why do so many of these “Loving Wives” try to excuse their cheating by claiming it was “just sex”? Is there any wife who would excuse her husband’s cheating for the same reason?

If anything, I would be MORE upset that my partner’s cheating had so little meaning!

The bottom line is, if EITHER partner has an issue with their sex life they should discuss it with their partner. Hopefully they can resolve it, MAYBE even with an open marriage, but if they can’t. then either the unsatisfied partner loves the partner enough to accept the situation, or they get a divorce and THEN seek their sexual satisfaction elsewhere.

Too Much...Seriously?

Here all along I thought you wrote cuckold stories and wouldn't even attempt to read them. You proved me wrong-in a big way...I love this story. Too bad about Melissa, the other girl deserves him. She treats him with love, respect, honor, etc. Such a good writer. I give you whatever the highest rating is.

Thoughts

“how she was viewed by rich, successful, and high-society people in our metropolitan area was one of the most important things in life to her.” – If that is true, then she was asking for trouble marrying “beneath her”.

I would HOPE, and definitely EXPECT, that she would be there for you when your parents died!

As far as trusting Jasper goes, since HE’S the one that told YOU, I would think he could be trusted, LOL!

Thief

A thief by any name is still a thief. And no matter how well behaved otherwise, he is a low life.

WHAT IFS GET TRUMPED BY

how come I didn't. TK U MLJ LV NV

good story

some nice twists, not straight forward, or clean, by a long shot. I started to think that Doreen was going to kill him after he was declared dead, so no one would know who he was, get the cash from the donation foundation to boot. I didn't like the hubby after what he planned to do. there was too much collateral damage to people that really loved him. I hate what if's, but if the golf pro had drugged her, or blackmailed her, or who knows what circumstances there could have been. he didn't even try to talk to her. I actually think he was worse than her. He hurt too many people in this story. having to be put in shrink classes is not a way to live, and shows the depth of her hurt. Ok, she cheated, she knows that for sure, the way the story is written, does anyone believe she isn't sorry about it, or would do it again, I don't think so. good story, in that it showed how vengeance can get ahead of you, and be empty. he was sorry and felt bad, on my.

hello

one thing i don't understand how a man love like a electric switch just on and just off and why a man became so much chicken shit like that hero of story well if he have issue whit his wife why he punish other peoples how love him and don't he have a bone to stand against his wife and get profs and divorces her some Q hope writer told us

I know it is just a story

But I agree with rightbank. How he solved the problem made no sense. It was like he decided to shout himself in both feet.