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Excellent rhyming. A few word/meter changes I'd make (like changing "giving" to "gave" in ego a boost) but otherwise, a fun romp.
Re: Rhyming
Thank you for your comments. I really need to work on meter. Do you think I should keep the same meter for each stanza or is it OK switching it up a little?
SYLVIA SUPER FREAK
the Mistress of the weak, peruses periodicas...while living week to week. TK U MLJ LV NV
FOR THE AUTHOR IN REPLY TO YOUR COMMENT
they are your poems, stories and submissions, to ask others to tell you what to inscribe reeks of plagiarism or copying. Do your own works, you have talent. Let others read and make their own decisions. The anon naysayers will roast you no matter what,
Respectfully TK U MLJ LV NV
Re:Tazz317
Thank you for the comments. I like your spirit.
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