You need to work on dialogue and figure out a believable way of people talking to each other.
At times I wish that there was more detail but I really have enjoyed everything so far. It has come together nicely and I can't wait to see where all it goes. Thank you for sharing it.
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You need to work on dialogue and figure out a believable way of people talking to each other.
Wonderful Little Story
At times I wish that there was more detail but I really have enjoyed everything so far. It has come together nicely and I can't wait to see where all it goes.
Thank you for sharing it.
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