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The entire poem has a pulse, pulse, pulse, butters, that I like, and there's a visual aspect to it I like as much. The staggered line lengths fit well with the narrative. "frag/ment" is a great metaphor on its own. A lot of layers to this poem.

This is excellent. It's got a build up to it that hums along in the background.

Faved.....

Love the mood and level of speed. Five of course.

The mood you set in this!

earthbound, battered, 'ripped and shorn and dragged three-quarters blue' Wonderful ending. Would have missed it if not for your thank you's in the comment thread.

Wonderful writing!

There's a great deal of movement in this poem that taken overall gives the sense of birth or awakening. It careens toward its conclusion without the reader knowing that it will end in such a burst of freedom but the movement and suspense carries one there surely. I would've given you an E and it needs a title! :-)

PS I agree with GM both about the layers and the wonderful break of frag/ment.

butters, loved this

it needs a title. that last image is haunting.

sounds like...

...oh, never mind
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if I had to pick the best lines, last five, although all good; care for a frag mint? refreshing in splittery sort of way