by LesseloovesPeter
I break the rules constantly so should you.
Mostly poking fun at the establishment. Why put your poetry "in the box"?
I know of one, don't bore too much or too often. And fuck, I probably break that one.
but here goes, with this
random is not good, reason is better,
here is your big line:
"within hallowed halls and ivy walls"
which while a cliche, still could be used if something more is done with it, off the top of my head ivy walls are poison to me and
hallowed halls echo in my head
still not good but it takes it one step away, it is incremental, it is all incremental
Your commentors
Poetry has rules?
No it has techniques, processes that generally work, you have one here that you use. It does work on a specific audience. We'll leave it at that.
For your improvement, read the comments on other's carefully. Between the lines.
caught 12. :) lose the my's and the's for the most part I'd edit too: thought process not tumbl'd to conformity' and add some commas, but that's just me and the prosidists would have a field day with it.and I 5ed with the first comment