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What, Then?
Gave an extra star because Evie says the story is true. But I'd like to know if she and Adam followed up and became real lovers, or not. I hope they didn't give up just because of "society". If they later met other people, that is sad, but fine. It happens. Or, are they still together? Ahhh...
Please continue
The love making was beautiful but I hope this is just the beginning. Let us know if their relationship continues
Again
Read the stories by her 'brother' once, it was good until they include mom and aunt, which seems very unbelievable
Why is it in the majority of stories on this site 'the door was slightly open'. 1*
Can't remember
There was a story that came out 2 days ago, it was a brother and sister who went to a party got drunk and then kissed in the elevator, and then the next day, fucked. Can someone tell me the name of that story, please?
@anon-answer
Its Jade by Smokingdragon. Itwas hot!
Total fucking rubbish
Condoms are for wanker, which the writer is a big one
Why
Ok you asked. The door is slightly open because you can't see through a closed door!!
WTF
Holy Shit this story is CRAP! I couldn't get into it at all what with the screwed up sentences like "I say the light on..." and "What to do want to do". Maybe if it was in English, I could actually enjoy it.
Good story
Unlike the above comments, I think that this is a good story. I see that this is your first submission. Do not let these losers discourage you. I am looking forward to more of your work.
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Hey, maybe it needed an extra read-through but i thought it was pretty good with well described sex. Too bad there are so many angry people out there. If someone doesn't like it he can write it off as not being his cup of tea but why the abuse? Not necessary at all.
What we have here is a true sex story. She fucks here brother with a rubber, and this anonomous ugly queer man complains. Hey, queer , go fuck your mom without a rubber. The other queer anonymous always complains of a spelling error. Hey queer, we are not all teachers like you. Go get you an english teacher job, and keep your faggot comments to your ugly self. This is a young girls admittance to us, and giver her a chance.
anonymous assholes
If people don't have the balls (or whatever) to sign their name to their criticism, then ignore it.
Sure, there's a few examples where an extra read through would have helped, and the story ended abruptly with little tenderness after sex, but hey, it was a sweet story and I look forward to reading more of yours.
listen to the bad comments ONLY
if you want to improve (and you really need to) then listen ONLY to the bad comments. the fake rave reviews only stroke your EGO but do nothing to help you improve. do all readers a favor and delete this story and have a GOOD EDITOR or GHOST WRITER rewrite it for you. then it might be worth reading but not as is.
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