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Barb Becomes a Sex Toy Ch. 03

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous12/11/13

So when does the husband find out his wife is now a slut

The husband can smell the sex if he comes home? Also she crossed the line and she needs to get caught. Payback is a bitch. This Carl is just using her for a cum dump .

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by TornadoTys12/12/13

Later on !

Does the husband benefit from her new sexual awakening or does discover she is cheating, then what will happen to her ! ?

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by Anonymous12/12/13

Even fantasy needs to have a modicum of reality.

The size of the testicles doesn't determine how much semen is produced, neither do they control the quantity or quality of erections. As well, women are emotionally predetermined to associate sex with relationship, as the saying goes: Men only needs place to have sex, women need a reason. So to that end, once the euphoria is gone, once the orgasm fades, where the fuck is the guilt?

If she has none, the. She has no feelings for her supposed husband and it begs the question: Why stay married? If she is having guilt free, great sex with another man, then why stay with a man that she barely tolerates? Get a divorce, take half his crap and live happily ever after somewhere else.

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by m48gunner12/12/13

Consequences

How about some consequences for their actions, neither gives a crap about the marriage or the husband, and nothing should be for free. The story is pretty well written, but we need the tension of discovery, consequences, and ultimately the resolution of a destroyed marriage.

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by Anonymous12/12/13

very hot and erotic for the "out of control" types.....

But still suffering from spelling and grammar troubles.
Do you like your work?
You can do a fine job telling a story and have apparently reduced the constant declarative sentence issue somewhat, but still need more work on the editorial aspect. Take pride in what you do and determine to let it go only when you're satisfied that it's technically as right as the story.
Oh, than, then....do you know the difference?
And two, to and too....better, but still need to get it clear in your mind where each makes a point clearer or muddles the whole thing....
I don't care much for the storyline, but this is LW, after all, and it is very, very hot!

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