decompression's a wonderful thing

See, you can do titles easily

I like and as you mentioned, timing is everything as it is with line breaks here. Good one, kind grabs the guts a twists them around. Love the title, it's a great hat.

cheers, neo :)

it could lose that 'you' L4? depends on how that 'you' is voiced/heard. shudda had it italicised, maybe, or dropped entirely.

rapture 360

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(inside joke)
can the first line, too clever, not really needed.
Actually I would force it to smilingly for loopy effect
5ed

i can use those suggestions, 12 x

i like how smilingly works loopily - does it broaden the line enough to keep the balance that was 6 lines even though i lose the first line? do i need to amend the first line of part two to keep things even, or is it just a case of shifting the fulcrum?

*smiles at inside-out joke* panoramic, baby! :D

Saw this in live

felt those nitrogen bubbles there and left a comment. Thanks to 12 for leaving a recommendation. going to look at the other one. Well done butters. 5ed

esses

Kinda prefer reef beckons to reefs beckon. And wondered whether either of the you's are needed. Minor quibbles - ignore'em.