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Like it
I like the flow and feeling invoked.
There are a number of lines that have no obvious first meaning for me (e.g. remembrance of the norm'). Usually that puts me off a poem. I find I still like this one.
looks like...
you have repeats already, but start some many lines with "A" is risky, don't quite think it is the sound you want here
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So many times
when I read a poem that is so well written and contains that much thought and emotion, I find myself working hard to understand the meaning. Sometimes I think I get it, other times I know I don't. With yours it doesn't matter, I can just close off and enjoy the words and the flow for what it is and think about the what it means later.
Sad ,
Emptiness of ghostly musings ? Tess you are exploring after-life , too !
Lovely Villanelle
You've woven it together skillfully--the reps feel seamless-- and I felt like I was hearing the regretful smoky voice of Marley's ghost. :-)
Now I don't care much for form poems
but this one was pretty good.
melancholy beauty
I always look forward to a Tristesse poem. Your form poems never disappoint, this one is sad and beautiful. Sorry I can't add anything constructive, but it doesn't need any :)
~ maria
I kind of agree
with 1201 about the A sound and the way it looks on the page, however the content of the poem, the ghosting effect of the repetitious lines paints your ghost in such an ethereal, timeless poignancy that I really couldn't care less about that quibble.
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