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by Angeline05/17/04

Good sustained metaphor

More specific detail would make this even stronger though, more description of color or shape, sound, the feel of the heat--I think anything in a poem that evokes a reader's senses adds to the experience. Not to detract from your poem though--it's very good. :)

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