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Flesh to Flesh Ch. 01

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by Anonymous12/15/13

I wanted to enjoy this story considering I'm a HUGE fan of the zombie genre;

but you spent a full half of the story repeating yourself from both pov. It is both unnecessary and boring. If you feel the need to include both viewpoints, don't repeat everything verbatim, simply use our existing knowledge to gloss over the pedantic parts and highlight certain phrases or thoughts.

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