Not exactly bad, but needs an editor, enough mistakes to be noticeable. Keep up the good work!C71A
Not even including the the grammatical errors, the language seems forced.
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Decent, needs an editor
Not exactly bad, but needs an editor, enough mistakes to be noticeable. Keep up the good work!C71A
Seems contrived
Not even including the the grammatical errors, the language seems forced.
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