DarkFyre Ch. 00

like it.

could be interesting, please continue

I am digging it.

So far so good. I like the picture you paint. Glad he's not all brawn no brains. This could be a very engaging tale. I hope you post frequently.
Good luck.

Hmm. For some reason, not only has a duplicate of this chapter posted (which I submitted twice mistakenly) but the post of Chapter One, which was up earlier this afternoon, is now gone. Trying to figure out what the problem is, folks. Thanks for your patience.

Brilliant plot development but.......

I'm seeing a definite overuse of adjectives, it feels almost too descriptive at times!
That is my only negative point, the storyline is refreshing and original!
I love it :)