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by Anonymous

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by GuiltyPleasure12/20/13

What a lovely thing....

.....to find as I had my morning coffee. Musical and whimsy all wrapped up in perfection as only you can do. I was puzzled by the third stanza but the poet has a reason for the words she/he uses. A definite 5..

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by twelveoone12/20/13

S2

is problematic, looks like a time spacer
last two lines of S1 - do die for, very good
S3 - hello!
5ed

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by Ashesh912/21/13

Freud : Cupid's arrow is subconsciously a

Phallic symbol !!5-ed .

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by GuiltyPleasure12/21/13

I mis-typed

I meant s/2 in my comment - s/3 is sublime.

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by tazz31712/21/13

98% OF THE TIME

is how love at 1st sight or arrows 'bite. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by todski2812/21/13

strophe two

is all context and meant for the person who invoked cupids arrow not just any reader, first time I have seen you be a little selfish in a write ;-)

title foreshadows
final strophe kills
strophe one beautiful imagery,

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by butters12/22/13

thankyou

and you're right, all of you, about s2 - it's a summing of the elemental qualities discovered. yes, tods, it is a selfishness, an indulgence, and it's good that you don't feel i do that as a rule :) ta.

12, you did good pointing that out to me. it works without, and i allowed personal feelings to cloud poetic judgement. what's an integral truth for the two is an exclusion-zone to everyone else.

thanks for the encouragement, everyone
xx

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by HarryHill12/23/13

Now that everone has posted

and new poems slides off the public eye (maybe) I can leave my insubstantial comments about how well you have woven the moments between us into a poem that while not completely understood by others inspired some great comments. The arrow still surprises me too. :)

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