Your grammar is horrible. Missing periods and capitalizations after dialog where it's not supposed to be.
Yeah, I'm nit-picking, but it makes it distracting while reading. But then, the mindless bots that don't have an education don't give a hoot because they're illiterate.
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Anonymous01/01/14
grammer? who gives a shit, it's a fuck story you moron.
by
Anonymous01/02/14
STUPID STORY
NINCOMPOOP AND SHORT UNFINISHED STORY!
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Anonymous01/02/14
Ok-ish
We get that he is her brother. You don't need to say brother every 3 seconds. It ruins the mood. Not only that, this story was way to short to build up any heat.
Chapter 2 was worst than the first. Is this going to be the pattern for the whole series?
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Anonymous01/18/14
incest with
Yes I to love to feel daddys cock inside my wet pussy and feel his spunk shoot inside my wet pussy so I got my little brother to do the same god did I cum over his hard cock
English
Want more
Live the story but why so short?
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Your grammar is horrible. Missing periods and capitalizations after dialog where it's not supposed to be.
Yeah, I'm nit-picking, but it makes it distracting while reading. But then, the mindless bots that don't have an education don't give a hoot because they're illiterate.
grammer? who gives a shit, it's a fuck story you moron.
STUPID STORY
NINCOMPOOP AND SHORT UNFINISHED STORY!
Ok-ish
We get that he is her brother. You don't need to say brother every 3 seconds. It ruins the mood. Not only that, this story was way to short to build up any heat.
Chapter 2 was worst than the first. Is this going to be the pattern for the whole series?
incest with
Yes I to love to feel daddys cock inside my wet pussy and feel his spunk shoot inside my wet pussy so I got my little brother to do the same god did I cum over his hard cock
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